Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, many people hire people for their household work because they dont have enough time to make and take care of their house so it is good for them and do by themselves without taking any help.In the next paragraphs I will expain behind the reason in it and give example.

On the one hand, there are some reason why people pay somebody to do their work instead of doing themselves.Firslty some people are too much busy in their work schedual so they dont time to do their so they hire some peole like cook for cooking and driver so they get more time to do more work for earning money. For example, In India, Mukash Ambani give work to other because he is busy ih their business if he will do it so how he can concentrate on his buisness. In this way he will manage everything. This is not only good him but also good fior these poeple who do work for him because they get some money for completing their basis needs.Secondly,it will help to decrease unemplement rate.To justify that if people provide work to others and pay for them so its good chance to get somework for those who dont have any jobs. Inthis way they can complete their basis needs.As a result, they can make a way for other people to earn somthing.

On the other hand, people must do their work by themselves with some reasons.First and formost is they can spend some time with family members.To be more precise it, if people do their work so they can spend their quality of time with childen and other famliy member which makes good bond in future.While busy in their whole week their work.As a result , it makes healthier life with their famliy members.Futhermore, If they do it my themselves so they can stay healtheir. To expain it . If people do their house work so they dont need to do exercise at gym because they already do it while doing household like if they do mooping so it will exercise of their back and other body parts.As a result, people can save that money which they spend it in gym.

In conclusion, although people hire somebody for their with some reason but i believe it is good for them if they do these things by themseleves with reason that i already mentioned above.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: the first body paragraph explains how hiring help can provide income and reduce unemployment, while the second argues that people should do household tasks themselves to spend time with family and stay active. Your conclusion also makes your position clear in favour of doing these tasks personally. These are relevant reasons, and the Ambani example gives one point some support. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the benefits of hiring help are explained more fully, while the family-time and exercise arguments need clearer explanation and more specific support. The introduction also promises reasons but does not clearly state your position. Make your view explicit from the beginning and develop each main reason with a precise explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for each side, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the discussion. Within paragraphs, however, progression is sometimes difficult to track: the first body paragraph moves from busy workers to a named businessperson and then unemployment without clearly connecting these points. Some linking phrases are also mechanical or awkward, including “To justify that” and repeated “As a result” transitions. The sentence beginning “While busy in their whole week their work” is unclear and interrupts the family-time argument. Organise each paragraph around one main idea, explain it in a logical sequence, and use referencing and transitions more naturally.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “household work,” “unemployment rate,” “quality time,” and “basic needs,” and you attempt phrases such as “concentrate on their business.” However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response harder to understand, for example “schedual,” “unemplement,” “mooping,” and “basis needs.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “make and take care of their house” and “complete their basic needs.” Repetition of “work,” “people,” and “do” further limits flexibility. Build a bank of accurate collocations for domestic services, employment, and family life, and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, using clauses with “because,” “if,” and “which,” as in “if people do their work so they can spend their quality of time with children.” This shows an effort to vary sentence structure, but some complex sentences are not controlled, and several errors affect clarity. For example, “they dont time to do their” is missing grammatical elements, while “if he will do it so how he can concentrate” has an incorrect conditional structure and word order. There are also problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation, particularly where sentences run together. Practise forming clear conditional sentences and check subject–verb patterns, articles, and punctuation. Shorter, accurate sentences will help make your ideas easier to follow.

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