Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Few individuals belive that paying to folks for the things you are unable to do is okay although some have different opinnon on this . this essay will discuss both views in the next pargras.

Paying someone for Your work has numerous benefits as first and foremost is time saving. For instance,some working professional are so busy in their jobs so its kind more burden for them as they have to do these things by themself . so they wanted someone to cook for them and look after their kids while they are doing their job . beacuse they dont have to worry about the household chores they can do some extra hours at work that will more them more money. moreover this creates more job opperuntines for folks who are good at taking care of childrens , doing cleaning of houses and for the cooks who are good at their job.

on the other hand, its also a waste of money for people who are ample at and they still pay workers to do these stuff. For example if someone is working 8 hours and after that he is taking care of his son or daughter that will have more good connection with them in future rather than someone else who taking care of them. Another point is, when you cooking your own food you know what types of spices you are adding and if someone making your food .

overall, in my opinnon benefits of paying someone cannot be neglected, but doing your things by yourself makes you more comfortable and confident.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: the benefits of paying others, including creating jobs, and reasons people may prefer to do tasks themselves. Your position is clearest in the conclusion, where you acknowledge benefits but also value independence and comfort. However, the discussion is uneven: the employment benefit is mentioned briefly, while the argument about doing tasks yourself is supported by examples but not fully explained. The opening says the essay will discuss “both views,” yet it does not establish your own position clearly. To strengthen the response, state your view directly in the introduction and develop each main reason with a clearer explanation of why it matters.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph supporting paid help, a contrasting paragraph, and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “For instance,” “moreover,” and “on the other hand” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from saving time to earning more money and then job creation without clearly connecting these points. Some sentences also contain unclear references, such as “that will have more good connection with them.” Use topic sentences to establish each paragraph’s main point, and make links between examples and claims more explicit. This would make the overall organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “household chores,” “taking care of their kids,” “waste of money,” and “job opportunities.” These phrases allow the reader to understand the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make the writing less precise, such as “opinnon,” “pargras,” “job opperuntines,” and “ample at.” Some expressions are also vague or unnatural, including “do these stuff” and “more good connection.” Aim to use accurate, natural phrases for employment and childcare, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish your arguments and make them sound more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a reason-and-result structure in “because they don’t have to worry about the household chores they can do some extra hours at work.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “some working professional are so busy in their jobs so its kind more burden for them” has problems with agreement and sentence construction, while “when you cooking your own food” is missing an auxiliary verb. There are also inconsistent sentence boundaries and punctuation, particularly in the long first body paragraph. Practise building accurate sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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