Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.
Is this a good way of providing work for others?
Should people do these things themselves?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
now a days, its not just a trend that both partner work for their family but its becomes a requirements that both have to do work to maintain their family income due to high living standard. few of them find its very difficults to take care of their home and kids.to address this kind of issues they hired a maid who can help them.
Furthermore ,in todays era every one want to do work to support their financially stability. but in some cases they can not find job due to their weak study. in opposite some people have a high valued job but they cannot handle both household chores and their children same time thus they decided to give opportunitis someone who really need work but can not find just because of they are less educated. in this way they indirectly helps unemployed person and also get stress less life for their own.
Moreover if they hire maid for their house they find spare time for their self and they can get chance to purse their hobbies or they can spends quality times with their loved ones .and its also reduced burden of their responsibilities especially for women.
On other hand, some individuals who do not have any professional worker they always said that everyone should have to all work by them self without any support. may be its their own thinking due to they are physically fit or they have a more stamina to so all work alone.
In conclusion, i think its vary person to person but according to me if you have a handsome income so its not a bad idea to give other person chance to earn from you and find some lisuear time for your self.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: whether hiring help provides work for others and whether people should perform these tasks themselves. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding 'weak study' and 'less educated' individuals is a bit repetitive and lacks depth. While the position is clear, the supporting arguments could be more nuanced. The conclusion is brief but effectively summarizes the writer's stance. To improve, ensure that each paragraph provides a more detailed explanation or a concrete example to fully explore the implications of the points raised.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'On other hand' are used to link sentences and paragraphs. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is slightly disrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'in opposite some people have a high valued job'. Additionally, the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, which creates minor confusion. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence of the essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'financial stability' and 'household chores'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'stress less life', 'handsome income' (in the context of personal wealth), and 'lisuear time'. Spelling errors, such as 'opportunitis' and 'purse' (instead of pursue), are also present. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise vocabulary and ensuring correct spelling and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('its becomes a requirements'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms ('everyone want to do work'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, the student should focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common grammatical slips.
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