Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.
Is this a good way of providing work for others?
Should people do these things themselves?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
It is commonly seen in many cities where people hire others iindividuals to complete the tasks, such as household chores or looking aftre their children because they are not interested to do the work by themsleves or due to time contstraints. Although this method is helpful for others those are under poverty, I believe that people should be self dependent because it gives them satisfaction and improves their family relationships.
One major merits to give work to others is that it helps them a chance to earn money those who are under poverty. This is because many people are not able to secure jobs in industries because they are uneducated and fall under low income. When they are hired by others for their children unbringing, then they can complete their desires by their earning. As a result, they feel part of society and stress free.
Howevern, the significant reason why I believe people should do these things themselves is that it gives them satisfaction when they complete their own work by themselves. This trend has been becoming popular in nuclear families, which means that parents who are often busy in their work, and they feel guilt for their children upbringing. As a consequence, they hire othert people. But work is being completed by them, they feel more satisfied, which helps to reduce stress.
Finally, parents are the first teacher for their children, They try to immetate their parents behaviours and learn sverral things, such as they learn empathy towrads others, respecting their elders and helping their parents in house hold chores. Although teachning children at younger age can be stressfull, it helps to strenthen their family bonds.
To sum up, even though taking help from others can be beneficial for people who earn less salary, I believe that those who take up the responsibilities of their work feel more satisfied and also imporove their family bonds. In my opinion, people should strike a balance for the work that is crucial for them or they can take help from others in case of emergency situation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have addressed both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing work for others and the reasons why people should perform tasks themselves. Your position is clear from the introduction and maintained throughout. The ideas are relevant, though the development in the second paragraph regarding 'unbringing' and 'desires' is slightly vague. To improve, ensure that your supporting arguments are more precisely articulated. For instance, instead of saying people can 'complete their desires', you could explain how steady income improves their quality of life or access to education. Overall, the response is well-structured and directly answers the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. You use cohesive devices such as 'Although', 'As a result', and 'Howevern' (note the spelling error) to link ideas. While the progression is generally clear, some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The referencing is mostly effective, though occasionally the connection between sentences could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different aspects of the argument, which helps the reader follow your line of reasoning easily. Overall, the structure is sound and supports the development of your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'self-dependent', 'nuclear families', and 'empathy'. However, there are several spelling errors ('iindividuals', 'aftre', 'themsleves', 'contstraints', 'unbringing', 'immetate', 'sverral', 'towrads', 'strenthen') and some awkward phrasing, such as 'complete their desires'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and try to use more precise collocations to express your ideas more naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the conditional-style 'if' clauses and 'Although' complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('one major merits', 'parents who are often busy in their work, and they feel guilt') and awkward sentence construction ('But work is being completed by them'). While these errors are noticeable, they rarely cause confusion or impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, focus on refining your sentence structure and ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement throughout your writing.
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