Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.
Is this a good way of providing work for others?
Should people do these things themselves?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Nowadays it is normal to hire someone to do your daily things just because you don't want to do or you don't have enough time to do like cleaning house or for taking care of your children. I believe that this is a good way to provide employment to others. However, some personal work will be done by people themselves. Both the questions were discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
As per my perspective, I have balanced opinion. I think it is good to provide employment opportunities to someone for doing your household chores like cleaning, cooking and making things but for personal and family work you should have to find time. Some studies says that working parents didn't have time to take care of their children due to which sometimes children suffer from serious anxiety. We can also find lots of NGO and private agency who provide this type of services if needed. In major metropolitan cities people also provide door to door services like daycare and they spent their days with your child when you are at work.
Yes, definitely people should do their personal works and family works by themselves. This is not only important for parents or family but also equally important for children. They get to learn how to manage their own work without getting helps and manage workload.
In conclusion, I believe that people can hire someone and provide employment for some household chores but when it comes to family and raising a child it should be handled by themselves.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing employment and the necessity of personal involvement in family matters. However, the development is somewhat limited. While you mention that children may suffer from anxiety, this point is not fully explored or supported with a clear example. The position is clear, but the arguments remain at a surface level. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your reasoning by explaining 'why' or 'how' these services impact society or family dynamics in more detail, rather than just stating that they are 'good' or 'important'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'However', 'In conclusion', and 'As per my perspective'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'Both the questions were discussed in the upcoming paragraphs' is an awkward way to introduce the essay). To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects back to the main prompt.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You rely on repetitive phrasing such as 'do your daily things' and 'personal work'. There are also some minor collocation errors, such as 'making things' or 'without getting helps'. To improve, focus on using more specific terminology related to the topic, such as 'domestic responsibilities', 'outsourcing', or 'child-rearing', and ensure that you use nouns and verbs in their correct forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the fluency of the text. Examples include 'Some studies says' (subject-verb agreement), 'didn't have time' (tense inconsistency), and 'they spent their days' (incorrect tense for a general truth). Punctuation is also inconsistent in places. To achieve a higher score, focus on subject-verb agreement and maintaining consistent verb tenses throughout your arguments. Proofreading for these small errors will significantly improve the quality of your writing.
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