Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In our 21st century, within certain period of time it is probably an excellent option to offer handful people a peny to perfrom the works that we are not able to do, or we are lacking time period to perfrom it including works like, home workloads or taking care of a small kid.

In the hustle and bustle of life, each and every individual require rest to perfrom well in the upcoming tenure. So as per my opinion, it is normal to ask some empoverished human to perfrom our household chores as they are aslo in search of wherewithal and our own body will also be relieved from that physical stress. Household chores includes cleaning, dusting, cooking, washing, etc., which is eventually a part of physically and mentally stress if not performed at the correct time.

Being an working individual, it is not a piece of cake to manage both homework loads and taking care of our child. As today's generation children require more attention than the previous one, as every kid is busy in mobile phones either playing games or watching reels. So a person is required to look after the children for their mental growth and support. There is an option of grandparents taking care of our child but because of their age factor it is not possible to be depended on them for such huge responsibilities. Taking precautions for those household workers and caretaker, we should fit live cameras in our respective homes and should track the live locations of that individuals to prevent certain non negotiable incidents.

Hence, it is a way more relevant option of keeping helpers to provide them a wherewithal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing work for others and the question of whether people should perform these tasks themselves. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding grandparents is introduced but not fully explored in relation to the broader societal implications of outsourcing childcare. The position is generally clear, but the reasoning lacks depth and nuance. To improve, you should expand on the 'why' behind your opinions, perhaps discussing the economic impact on the workers or the psychological impact on family dynamics, rather than just listing chores or stating that life is busy.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. While you use some cohesive devices like 'In the hustle and bustle of life' and 'Hence', the transitions between ideas can feel abrupt. For example, the jump from discussing household chores to the specific issue of children using mobile phones lacks a smooth logical bridge. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be more cohesive to ensure that each point leads naturally to the next. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear topic sentences would enhance the overall progression of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, though there are several instances of awkward word choice and spelling errors that occasionally impede the flow. Phrases like 'offer handful people a peny' (handful of people a penny) and 'empoverished human' (impoverished individuals) are imprecise and unnatural. Additionally, 'wherewithal' is used incorrectly in this context, as it typically refers to the necessary means or resources to do something, rather than just money or a job. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is appropriate for a formal essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'each and every individual require'), incorrect article usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'a way more relevant option'). Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are overly long and convoluted, which affects clarity. While the meaning is usually clear despite these errors, the frequency of mistakes prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your accuracy.

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