Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays everybody is running after materialistic things that makes their schedule hectic. People are paying to others who are doing their things, for which they do not have time or they are not willing to do so such as taking care of their children and household activities. it is not a beneficial method to provides jobs to others. they have to do their tasks by themselves. There are numerous reason behind this, which are explicated in in coming paragraphs.

To commence with, parents are first teacher of children, offspring learn a lots of things from their parents. To elaborate it, moral and ethical values is the thing that can teach by parents to their children instead of the guy who is hired to look after. For example if a person is assigned to take care, he will do only those things for which he is appointed, means its not his duty to make your children a good human being, he just prepare food for your child and do only those things thar are included in upbringing. To make your child a good human being is in your hands.

Furthermore, assigning your work to others become a strong reason of stress and physical problem. To explain it, it is crystal clear that if someone other doing your day to day things, how you will indulge yourself physically in lot of activities that helps you to maintain your health. Moreover, if your are just following your professional life, it affects your mental health because you are just focusing on those things which are just for limited time periods. Leave these things and try to give your time to your family, is the only remedy that plays vital role in everyone's life.

To sum up, do your tasks and give time to your children, avoid to crate jobs for others who are just here for money because health and family is a key success and a treasure for everyone.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, though the development of ideas is somewhat limited. You clearly state your position that people should perform these tasks themselves, particularly regarding childcare. However, the argument regarding 'providing work for others' is under-developed; you dismiss it as 'not a beneficial method' without fully exploring the economic or social implications of outsourcing labor. The points about moral values and physical health are relevant, but the explanation remains somewhat repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with more nuanced reasoning or specific, illustrative examples that go beyond general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'To sum up' to signal transitions. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences is slightly disjointed, such as the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences lack smooth connectivity. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You attempt to use some less common vocabulary, such as 'explicated', 'upbringing', and 'remedy'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'running after materialistic things', 'crate jobs', and 'indulge yourself physically in lot of activities'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your argument. To improve, focus on learning collocations and using words in their correct context rather than relying on direct translations or slightly unnatural phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'things that makes their schedule'), missing articles (e.g., 'in coming paragraphs'), and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'if someone other doing your day to day things'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, they are frequent enough to affect the flow of the writing. To achieve a higher score, focus on proofreading for basic errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency, and practice using more complex structures with greater accuracy.

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