Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern era, people hiring a mankind for the mandatory house work such as: cleaning dishes, look after their parents or kids. I believe that this is wrong idea to giving the responsibility of their family to others. One should not do this things.

To commence, in this contemporary era, each and every person are running for the money, thus, they are working 5 to 6 days a week for eight to twelve hours a day. An account of that, they do not have time to looking for their off-spring. For an instance, 2026 UNESCO survey suggested that, their is 45% of increment occurs of Couple's working trend in last tenure. Besides, in the weekends they have been going to buy grocery, vegetables also cleaning the house, therefor, they are not keeping eye on their children.

In my perspective, individual should not do that, they need to spare some time to spend with their child, as child needs his/her parents while growing up. They need to showered all the emotions to their kids; Love, Care, Affection, Support etc. Which children always crave for from their parents. Apart from that, offspring always learns good values and respect from their parents, if kids do not get emotional and physical support from their family, they are started doing wrong things. For example, In Juvenile Jail of United States, they found that majority of kids who are punished are not close their family and have the wrong idea to do crime.

To Conclude, I believe that mankind ought to look after their family and spend quality time with them, also nurture their next generation well, In lieu of giving the money to someone else to take care of the kids.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: whether it is a good way to provide work and whether people should do these things themselves. However, the development is uneven. The first question regarding providing work is largely ignored, with the focus shifting almost entirely to the second question. The arguments regarding parental responsibility are clear, but the supporting evidence, such as the '2026 UNESCO survey', appears fabricated and lacks relevance to the actual prompt. To reach a higher band, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are balanced and provide more logical, realistic support for your arguments rather than relying on invented statistics.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'An account of that' is used incorrectly to mean 'On account of that', and 'In lieu of' is used awkwardly at the end of the conclusion. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs, the transitions between ideas are sometimes abrupt or confusing. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the flow of your writing significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic or formal context. Phrases like 'hiring a mankind' and 'do this things' are grammatically incorrect and demonstrate a lack of control over word choice. There is also frequent misuse of terminology, such as 'increment occurs of Couple's working trend'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'nurture' and 'contemporary era', the overall range is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. You should focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('each and every person are running'), incorrect verb forms ('they are started doing'), and misuse of articles and prepositions. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. For instance, 'they need to showered all the emotions' is grammatically incorrect. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and agreement, before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for these fundamental errors is essential.

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