Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

NOWADAY'S, WE CAN SEE THAT HOW IN THIS MODERN ERA THEIR ARE EACH AND EVERY JOB FOR MONEY. FOR EXAMPLE HOUSEHOLD CHORES OR LOOKING AFTER CHILDERNS.

FIRSTLY, SOMETIMES IT'S BETTER TO PAY SOMEONE TO DO THINGS FOR YOU WHICH YOU DONT WANT TO DO OR IF YOU DONT HAVE TIME TO THAT WORK. BEACUSE IT CREATES EMPLOYMENT FOR THOSE WHO ARE UNEMPLOYED AND IT CAN CREATE LIVING FOR THOSE WHO NEED FINICIAL SUPPORT. FOR EXAMPLE: IF A FAMILY HAVE BOTH WORKING PARENTS AND THEIR CHILD IS 5 YEAR OLD AND THEY DONT HAVE TIME TO TAKE CARE OF CHILD, SO THEY HIRE CARETAKER FOR THEIR CHILDER SO THEY WILL BE TENSION FREE AND OTHER PERSON WILL GET JOB AND WILL GET PAID FOR THE WORK.

ON THE OTHER HAND, PEOPLE SHOUD DO THIS KIND OF WORK BY THEIR OWN . BECAUSE THEY DONT KNOW THE NATURE OF THE ANOTHER PERSON AND WHAT THEY WILL DO WITH THERE CHILD. IT IS ALSO IMPORTANT THAT CHILD NEEDS SUPERVISION OF THEIR PARENTS WHICH A LOVELY BOND BETWEEN PARENTS AND CHILD.

IN MY OPINION, I THINK THAT HIRING SOMEONE FOR YOUR HOUSEHOLD WORK IS GOOD ONLY WHEN YOUR IN EMERGENCY AND THE HIRED PERSON IS TRUSTHWORTH AND LOYAL TO THEIR WORK. AS WE SEE THAT ALOT OF CHILDERN FEEL INCOMFORTABLE WITH THEIR PARENT TO TALK ABOUT SOMETHING IN WHICH THEY PROBLEM AS THEY TELL EVERY THING TO THEM WHO IS TAKING CARE OF THEM THIS CASE IS ONLY BEEN SEEN IN PARENTS WHO HIRE A CHILD CARETAKER.

IN COCNLUSIN, SOMETIMES IT IS GOOD TO HIRE SOMEBODY TO DO THING BEACUSE IT CREATES JOB FOR THEM FROM WHICH THEY WILL MAKE LIVING FOR THEMSLEVES. ALTHOUGH WHEN HIRING SOMEONE LIKE THIS YOU ALWAYS CHECK THEIR BACKGROUNDS AND REVIEW OF THEIR SERVICE.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing work for others and the argument for doing tasks oneself. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the argument regarding the 'lovely bond' between parents and children is relevant but lacks depth. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are repetitive and rely on simple examples. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the societal implications of outsourcing labor and provide more nuanced reasoning regarding the personal responsibility of household management.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Firstly', 'On the other hand', 'In my opinion', 'In conclusion'). There are also issues with referencing; for instance, in the fourth paragraph, the sentence 'as they tell every thing to them who is taking care of them' is confusing and lacks clear antecedents. The flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed due to grammatical errors, which occasionally hinders the logical progression of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'things', 'work', and 'job'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'NOWADAY'S' (Nowadays), 'CHILDERNS' (children), 'FINICIAL' (financial), 'SHOUD' (should), 'TRUSTHWORTH' (trustworthy), and 'INCOMFORTABLE' (uncomfortable). These errors are frequent and sometimes distract the reader. To improve, you need to focus on accurate spelling and expanding your range of vocabulary to include more precise terms related to employment, domestic life, and social dynamics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('a family have', 'child needs'), article usage ('a 5 year old'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'AS WE SEE THAT ALOT OF CHILDERN FEEL INCOMFORTABLE WITH THEIR PARENT TO TALK ABOUT SOMETHING IN WHICH THEY PROBLEM'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the constant errors in basic grammar and punctuation significantly impact the readability of the text. You should focus on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting more complex ones.

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