Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.
Is this a good way of providing work for others?
Should people do these things themselves?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this modern era, sometime people pay somebody to do their work what they do not want or do not have time to do, for instance, household chores and care of their children. This is the good way to providing work to other because sometime they have no time to do. furthermore people should do these thing themselves as they can good care of their children as compair to other.
Yes defenetly, some time it is normal pay to someone for persanol work like cooking, swaping house and many another thing. if individual have no time for work or they do not want to this type of work so they can pay for it. furthermore it halps to people who have no work and who have job less. To cite an example, person who is facing unemployeement so it is very good way to give job apportunity.
In my opinion, people should their work by themselves. Because they know better hoe to do and what is their household chores possition. They know as good way how to care of their children and children also love their parents. If parents do not care of their children and keep caretaker for children so children can not connect with their parents. For inctance, it can be seen that who children live far away from their parents or working parents who do not take care of their doughter or son and keep caretekar so their children are very rude and do not conect eith their family
To conclude, It is sometime possible to pay somebody to do things which do not want to do. This is a very good think to give job apportunity while as we all know parants are the first school. So parants must take care of their doughter and son.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing work for others and the necessity of performing tasks oneself. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that hiring help creates job opportunities and that parents should care for their children, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the point about children becoming 'rude' if they have a caretaker is an over-generalisation that lacks supporting evidence or logical nuance. To improve, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations and specific, real-world examples rather than repeating the same ideas in different ways.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'furthermore' and 'to cite an example' are used, but the transitions between sentences are frequently abrupt or confusing. For example, the shift from discussing household chores to unemployment in the second paragraph feels disjointed. Additionally, referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'what is their household chores possition', which makes the logical progression difficult to follow. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'swaping' (sweeping), 'defenetly' (definitely), 'persanol' (personal), 'halps' (helps), 'apportunity' (opportunity), and 'doughter' (daughter). These errors are noticeable and occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you need to move beyond basic vocabulary and focus on using more precise terms related to the topic, such as 'outsourcing,' 'domestic responsibilities,' or 'socio-economic impact,' while ensuring correct spelling and collocation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people pay somebody to do their work what they do not want'), article usage, and sentence fragments. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. For example, 'if individual have no time for work or they do not want to this type of work so they can pay for it' contains multiple errors in structure and preposition usage. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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