Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Sometimes people believe that it is good to pay somebody to do things we won't have time to do. These include household activities and looking after children. I believe it will not only be a good way of providing work for others but also, it will be good way to get some personal time and relax properly.

In a fast paced world, there are various responsibilities an individual has to look after. One of the Most Important responsibility is to to take care of family and keep up with all the expenses of house. There is a lot of pressure from workplace to meet the standards of clients and delievering the best performance. In such daily activities, it is hard to get a breather and re-energize ourseleves. Due to this, it is a good idea to pay somebody else and hire a servant who could do basic household activities like washing utensils, cleaning the floor, maintaining the backyard and so on. Moreover it will an ideal way for someone to make ends meet by securing a job. For Example, as per the survey done by London Mental Health Council, out of 500 people who took part in it, 400 observed better overall work life satisfaction after they hired a person to do the household work. Sometimes, a child feels alone while his/her parents are on their regular workday. It is a considerable option to enroll with childcare community which will make sure proper care and attention for there ward, while being at workplace.

There is always a choice to do these things ourselves but, in these challenging times it is also important to be the best version everyday.

Hence, at times, it is smart to consider hiring someone who could do all household work. It will be a wise way to think by joining a childcare organization and handing them over the child while workinng at jobplace.

Hence, we can say that being the better variant of ourselves each day is more important to keep going on. Hence, we should be intelligent in utilizing the manpower and resources, wherever needed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing work for others and the question of whether people should perform these tasks themselves. The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive. While you mention the benefits of hiring help, the discussion on whether people 'should' do these things themselves is less nuanced and relies on general statements about being the 'best version' of oneself. To reach a higher band, ensure that the counter-arguments or the necessity of self-reliance are explored with more depth and specific reasoning rather than repeating the same justification for hiring help.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'For Example', and 'Hence', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive, particularly the overuse of 'Hence' in the conclusion. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is quite brief and feels disconnected from the main body. Improving the flow between sentences and using a wider variety of linking words would enhance the overall coherence of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'work-life satisfaction' and 'childcare community'. However, there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'delievering the best performance' (spelling error), 'jobplace' (non-standard), and 'better variant of ourselves' (unnatural collocation). To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive or slightly unnatural phrasing. Expanding your range of vocabulary to include more sophisticated synonyms would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('One of the Most Important responsibility is to to take care'), punctuation errors, and spelling mistakes ('delievering', 're-energize ourseleves', 'workinng'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and spelling, and try to incorporate more complex sentence structures with greater accuracy.

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