Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Paying someone for helping in work that actually we do not have time to do in this busy lifestyle become so common. Work like babysitting or cleaner.

Hiring person for taking care of one's house and for babysitting is natural among people these days , because everyone nowadays are career focused do not get time to pay attention to ones house work. So this way provider can help to make things easy for them and get employment for themselves. For example, if both the partners are career focused and spending most of time at work Can hire a cleaner to take care of their house and make food for them .This way provider can not only help them to become more organized and save their time but also earn money for their survival.

However, people must take responsibility for some work like taking care of their children. To make strong bond and emotionally satisfied person must be present for their children perticular time, no doubt babysitter can help them to take care of their kid but unable to provide parent touch to baby. To illustrate, sometime if both parents are out of house and keep their babies with caregiver can result in loneliness and anxiety among children.

which stays with them forever.

In conclusion, paying others to help for ones house chores and taking care of babies can help to increase employment for them but sometimes with sensitive cases Like family matter make bond with babies can suffer and result in dissatisfaction for parent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing employment and the necessity of personal involvement in childcare. However, the development is somewhat superficial. While you mention that hiring help aids employment and organization, the arguments could be extended with more depth. The position is clear, but the discussion on childcare is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully explored with more specific reasoning rather than just stating the obvious. The conclusion summarizes the main points effectively, but ensure the link between 'family matters' and 'dissatisfaction' is explained more clearly to avoid ambiguity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices like 'However', 'To illustrate', and 'In conclusion' to signal transitions. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is unclear, such as the sentence fragment 'which stays with them forever' which should be attached to the previous sentence. Additionally, some sentences lack smooth transitions, making the progression feel a bit disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring all sentences are complete would enhance the overall cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'babysitting', 'career focused', and 'household chores'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are some awkward collocations, such as 'make bond with babies' instead of 'form a bond' or 'build a bond'. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'provider' being used in a way that is slightly unclear. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that word combinations sound natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone nowadays are career focused') and article usage (e.g., 'keep their babies with caregiver'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences starting with lowercase letters after a period or being fragmented. These errors do not completely impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and sentence boundaries will significantly improve your accuracy.

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