Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.
Is this a good way of providing work for others?
Should people do these things themselves?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is seen that house helps and child cares are increasing day by day. The reason behind such change could be limited time or the feeling of not pursuing doing such stuff. However, I personally think that with the modernization, a lot of things have evolved and somewhere evolving everyday. It is important to look after their children and try doing household chores if thats feasible.
With the introduction of female work culture, women are evolving and a lot of changes has been observed in the past couple of years. For example, women's who used to spent their day at home are working mothers now. Therefore, there's a shift in roles of females, they work tirelessly to provide the family along with their partners. However, in order to achieve this, they often mess up with their childcare. Moreover, the alternative they discovered is providing childcare to their kids. As a consequence, the kid will develop in a school environment rather than homely setup.
The other factor that has compromised the family culture is modernization. Few people are willing to take the house responsibility. As both the partners are working they find it feasible to have a house help instead of doing their chores themselves. It could have happened because of urbanization, where folks believe to live in present and thus, do not give a thought of savings on income. Hence, as a result of this pattern, majority of people adopt the culture of having a outside help rather then investing little portion of their time in doing household work.
This initiative has helped in job creation. For example, a lot of graduates are opting the course of early childhood education as they are aware of the changes happening in the job market. Whereas, the house help also gets extra help to earn money to provide their family with doing part-time job of household chores.
To recapitulate, it has a downside of not investing in saving their money and losing the bond with their kids alongside, whereas, it has created a job market to individuals looking for a job.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the economic benefits of job creation and the personal aspect of whether people should perform these tasks themselves. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The discussion on childcare and household chores is clear, but the argument regarding 'modernization' and 'savings on income' is slightly underdeveloped and lacks logical depth. The position is generally clear, but the conclusion could be more decisive in balancing the two viewpoints. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with more specific, logical reasoning rather than general statements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a central theme. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'However', 'For example', 'As a consequence', and 'To recapitulate', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences is a bit disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph. Referencing is generally clear, but the connection between the idea of 'modernization' and 'not giving a thought of savings' is somewhat abrupt. Overall, the paragraphing is appropriate and the progression of ideas is discernible.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the student to express ideas clearly. There are some attempts at less common collocations, such as 'early childhood education' and 'job market'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'house helps', 'pursuing doing such stuff', and 'providing childcare to their kids' (which is ambiguous). Some errors, like 'outside help rather then', are minor but noticeable. To improve, focus on more precise terminology and natural collocations rather than relying on informal or slightly inaccurate phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('a lot of changes has been observed', 'women's who used to spent'), and incorrect preposition usage ('provide the family along with'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor slips throughout. The student demonstrates an ability to construct complex sentences, but the frequency of errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for basic agreement and tense consistency would significantly improve the score.
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