Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In modern and busy world people choose to hire cleaners or early child care professionals in order to take care of their household chores or to babysit their child while prioritize their work or just to avoid doing it. This essay will assess whether it is a good way to generate employment or people should do their chores by themselves.

To start with it looking it from a distant, it is contributing to national economy as educated and unemployed are getting employed. Additionally it is a win-win situation in both the cases people want their house to be hygienic and safe to live for which they are hiring highly trained professionals, not only that there are licensed early childhood educators who are government authorized to take care of your child so that people can focus on their other important work.

Furthermore, it is recommended that each one should do their work by their own, but as it is said: "modern problems need modern solutions". Situations which may or may not favour to do these things by their own. For example: senior citizen or disability are situations where situations demands this kind of help, to add more to it working couple need to hire babysitter so they can continue working with a security that their baby is in a safe environment with a qualified personnel building a safer and stronger community.

To conclude, there is no doubt to say that it is the most efficient way to generate employment. This way it is also helps in creating safe and stronger communities by being a helping hand to those who needs the most.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the economic benefits of hiring help and the circumstances under which individuals might choose to do so. However, the development is somewhat superficial. While you mention that it is a 'win-win situation' and cite examples like senior citizens or working couples, the arguments lack depth and specific supporting evidence. The position is clear, but the analysis remains at a general level. To improve, ensure that each point is fully extended with more detailed reasoning or concrete examples to demonstrate a more thorough engagement with the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To start with', 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'To conclude'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is slightly disjointed, such as the transition between the second and third paragraphs. Referencing is generally clear, but the sentence structure within paragraphs could be improved to ensure smoother transitions between ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'early childhood educators', 'hygienic', and 'qualified personnel'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'looking it from a distant' (should be 'looking at it from a distance') and 'disability are situations' (should be 'disability are circumstances'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise and varied vocabulary to express your ideas with greater sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'in modern and busy world' (in the modern and busy world) and 'those who needs' (those who need). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing commas after introductory phrases. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and refining your use of complex structures.

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