Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is no iota of doubt , money plays a significance importance in everyone's life. Anyhow if people do not have enough time, they have to give an amount to caretakers for their work at home or take our of their youngsters. I whole heartedly accord with this ideology and articulated points are mentioned in following sections.

Fundamentally, there are predominant factors to evidently

triggering this are observed here. The most important one is workaholic schedule, as multitudes are busy in their 24/7 work, as they are tied up in their morning, afternoon and night shifts according to their work flexibility , so they do not have enough time to do house chores. For instance, many people who does twelve hours night shifts, they have to complete their sleep in morning as well so that they can stay focus in their work, meanwhile they have to arrange their meals from outside and have to pay someone to make healthy food.

Is there any other supportive point? Yes, Indeed! Citizens have to pay someone for take care of children. as young ones need more care regarding their food and healthy body which is better done by care takers who done their early childhood course in which they teach better to take care and practice with good assessments. To vindicate, a survey was conducted by eminent personality Dr. Richard from Oxford University revealed that 80 percent of children are more healthy which cared by under the supervision of special care takers, as they give massages to them time by time.

Although , there services are not cheap, but for children's care and work chores it is good to pay someone.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: whether it is a good way to provide work and whether people should do these things themselves. However, the development is somewhat superficial. While you mention the benefits of hiring help for busy workers and the expertise of childcare professionals, the discussion on whether people 'should' do these things themselves is limited to a brief mention that it is 'good to pay someone.' To improve, you should provide a more balanced argument, perhaps discussing the personal value of performing one's own chores or the potential impact on family bonding, which would lead to a more fully developed response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'Is there any other supportive point? Yes, Indeed!' are overly conversational and do not fit the formal tone required for an IELTS essay. While you use some cohesive devices such as 'For instance' and 'To vindicate,' the logical progression is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and sentence structure. The transition between the idea of hiring help and the personal responsibility of doing chores is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, but there are several instances of unnatural collocation and word choice. For example, 'significance importance' is redundant, and 'take our of their youngsters' is unclear. Phrases like 'iota of doubt' and 'vindicate' are used in contexts that feel slightly forced or inaccurate. While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, the precision is inconsistent. To reach a higher band, focus on using collocations correctly and ensuring that your vocabulary choices are appropriate for a formal academic context rather than relying on idioms that may not fit the tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('many people who does twelve hours night shifts'), article usage ('in morning'), and awkward sentence construction ('there services are not cheap'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your accuracy.

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