Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is believed that it is possible to give payment to others to do things you are not willing to do, work such as household chores or childcare. According to the me this can be helpful for other people as well but doing their jobs manually cannot be denied. I will give my answer in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, if I am going with first question, the statement is in the favor of other people. To explain it further, if masses give jobs to the unemployed people when they are busy in their office life, this can be a great opportunity for them to earn money in a good way. For example, 'The Tribune' published a news that 55% people get childcare jobs in Uttarakhand in last few months. Resultantly, individuals can fulfil their family needs with these kinds of jobs.

On the other hand, it is believed that masses who do not do their work by their own they become a victim of some diseases. To elaborate it further, people who have sedentary lifestyle for example some people have office jobs they have to sit for long time, they become couch potato and have some dangers diseases, such as obesity. Moreover, people who do not care their children by their own. Just because of their hectic schedule therefore their kids to not give much attention in the further life. As a result, their bond is not become strong.

To conclude, although it is beneficial for people to get jobs like this, I strongly believe that masses must pay attention on their children to make their bond strong.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing work for others and the necessity of performing tasks oneself. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention job creation and health/family bonding, the arguments lack depth and specific analysis. For instance, the point about 'sedentary lifestyle' is relevant but could be better connected to the specific act of doing household chores. The position is clear, but the overall response feels slightly underdeveloped in its reasoning, which prevents it from reaching a higher band. To improve, ensure each main idea is fully explained with a clear link back to the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'On the other hand', and 'To conclude'. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'if I am going with first question'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between the news report and the broader argument could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the internal flow within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on some repetitive or informal phrasing, such as 'masses' and 'things'. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'dangers diseases' instead of 'dangerous diseases' and 'do not give much attention in the further life'. While the meaning is clear, the lack of more sophisticated or precise vocabulary limits the score. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific collocations and avoid overusing generic terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Examples include 'According to the me', 'do not do their work by their own', 'do not care their children by their own', and 'their bond is not become strong'. These errors in subject-verb agreement, preposition usage, and sentence construction are noticeable. While you attempt complex structures, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms will significantly improve your score.

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