Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this contemporary era, due to higher competition and career demands, the majority of people are residing alone, especially in urban areas which are neither beneficial for society nor for individuals. Consequently, a vast population is going through stress, frustration and weaker social bonds , however this can be tackled by organising social events and sports.

There are several negative consequences that arise from living alone citing sense of loneliness. Rather, to put it more simply, individuals work around the clock to cope with the world, however, coming home with no one to cook meals for them or have a conversation with them about their day leads to frustration and depression. On the other side, these days people have weaker bonds with their next-door neighbours, as people are extremely indulged in their careers, which leaves no time for them to interact with others living next to them. For instance, in Mumbai in 2025 a woman died in her apartment, and no one in her neighbourhood had an idea about what happened to her, and everyone knew after a week when her family started finding her with the assistance of police.

There are several strategies that can be applied to tackled this situation such as providing remote working option so one can work from home while living with their loved ones. Furthermore, socities can come with some event where residents could participate and interact with each other.

In conclusion,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks about the ethics and implications of outsourcing household chores and childcare, whereas your essay discusses the negative consequences of living alone and the lack of social interaction in urban areas. Because you did not address the specific questions regarding paying others for services or the personal responsibility of performing these tasks, the task achievement is severely impacted. Furthermore, the essay is under the 250-word minimum requirement, which further limits your ability to develop any relevant arguments. To improve, you must carefully analyze the prompt and ensure your ideas directly answer the specific questions asked.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak because the content does not relate to the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' and 'in conclusion,' but these are used to connect irrelevant ideas. The introduction attempts to set a context, but it fails to transition into the actual task. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is incomplete, ending abruptly after 'In conclusion,'. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly addresses a part of the prompt and that your ideas flow logically from one to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a reasonable range of vocabulary, such as 'contemporary era,' 'tackled,' and 'assistance.' However, there are instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'extremely indulged in their careers' (should be 'engrossed in') and 'citing sense of loneliness' (which is grammatically incorrect in this context). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, it is not consistently precise or natural. To reach a higher band, focus on using collocations correctly and expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to the actual prompt.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'which are neither beneficial for society nor for individuals' is a fragment when used as you have, and 'socities can come with some event' contains a spelling error and an awkward phrasal verb choice. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors prevents a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and ensuring your complex sentences are constructed correctly.

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