Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, people hire workers to complete their house work or take care of their children, I think it is the best way to contribute to a country to lower unemployment. I will discuss further points in coming paragraphs.

First of all, people who can afford worker to complete their daily task of home should hire individual, if they feel it is difficult to manage work life balance, as they can get time for themselves. Moreover, it benefites worker they earn money by doing the work so no more stress of unemployment. For instance, our neboure hire person to do her house works, she is a doctore and she do not have much time to do house work, after hiring worker she can spend some time for herself.

However, completely depending on workers makes people lazy and less active, and if they hire person to babysite the child then it may become a reason to build less connection with their own kids. Also, sometime workers are not trustworthy they theif things from home. For instance, my brother's house helper is so good with her work and sometime she do extra work too, as a result my brother become too lazy, after some time she stolen the expensive watch of my brother and it was unbelievable.

To conclude, having house helper is beneficial in various ways, but depending on them for everything and handover own kids to growup with them is not good choice. people should have to take help and pay when they require them casually.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the benefits of job creation and the potential downsides of over-reliance on domestic help. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the argument regarding unemployment is stated but not deeply explored, and the personal anecdotes are a bit simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more nuanced reasoning and ensure that your position remains consistent throughout the essay. While the main points are relevant, the conclusion introduces a slightly different perspective ('pay when they require them casually') that was not fully integrated into the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Moreover', 'However', and 'To conclude' to signal transitions. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'she' is used repeatedly without clear antecedents in some instances). The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that ideas follow a more sophisticated logical progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. However, there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'neboure' (neighbor), 'doctore' (doctor), 'babysite' (babysit), and 'theif' (thieve/steal). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology and ensuring correct spelling. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and relies on basic descriptors; incorporating more academic or topic-specific collocations would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the flow. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'she do not have', 'she do extra work'), article usage, and tense consistency (e.g., 'she stolen'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. To improve, you should pay closer attention to basic verb forms and sentence construction. Increasing the variety of complex structures while ensuring they are error-free will be essential for moving into the higher bands.

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