Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this Modern era, the tendency of hiring others to do things such as household chores or take care of children has significantly increased. I certainly believe that this is a ideal way of offering work for others due to the other commitments such as Long hours of work, and I would like to suggest that people should try to take care of their children by themselves.

To commence with, since people have no other option instead of hiring others to do the things that they do not want to do due to any reason. While working for long hours, it is not possible for him/her to manage the all things by themselves. So if they are financially capable of hiring someone to do the extra household chores or take care of their children, I do not think there is something wrong. This help will prevent the people from overwhelming, stress, and anxiety. In addition, people can focus genuinely on their work, if they know that their children are under the supervision of someone.

Nevertheless, people should take advantage of this service of hiring someone to do the household chores such as cleaning, cooking, cleaning of dishes. However, As per my opinion, people should manage to take care of their children by themselves only instead of relying on others. Because no body can provide the needed care and love to the child except the parents. if people are hiring someone to do look after their child, they can miss many milestones such as first word, first step, and required bonding.

In conclusion, Although this is the extra luxury service that people can have by hiring someone to do their household chores and taking care of their children due to shortage of time, which provide them relaxation and a safe place to their children, however as per my perspective, people should manage their daily schedule coo

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the economic benefit of hiring help and the personal responsibility of childcare. The position is clear throughout, particularly regarding the distinction between household chores and childcare. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding the economic benefits of hiring help is quite brief and could have been expanded with more specific examples of job creation. The conclusion is incomplete, which affects the overall impact of the argument. To reach a higher band, ensure that all points are fully developed and that the essay reaches a complete, coherent conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Nevertheless', and 'In addition' are used to link ideas. However, there are instances where the flow is slightly mechanical or repetitive. For example, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. Additionally, the final sentence is cut off, which disrupts the cohesion of the conclusion. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences flow naturally into one another would enhance the overall coherence of the piece.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to express their ideas clearly. There are some attempts at using more sophisticated phrases like 'financially capable' and 'under the supervision of'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing or minor errors, such as 'prevent the people from overwhelming' (should be 'prevent people from becoming overwhelmed') and 'extra luxury service'. The range is sufficient to communicate, but more precise and varied vocabulary would be needed for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'a ideal way' (an ideal), 'manage the all things' (manage everything), and 'no body' (nobody). There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent the essay from reaching the 7.0 band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would be beneficial.

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