Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

if this modern world, people are more busy than older time so they don’t have time to do their own work, such as household course and looking children. Some people thinks that this is a good way of providing work for others, while other things that people should do this things by themselves. I will explain this both reason with relevant examples in upcoming paragraphs.

On the first Hand, few of people thinks that this is the good thing to give employment to others for earning money , who really needs job and also most of the people are doing their work so they can save time for complete their office work. For example, my sister-in-law, and my brother, both are doing work so might be, they don’t have time for doing their house cleaning and making food so they hire a care, take for their apartment. So providing work for others creates employment, who really needs income.

on the other hand, some people believe that people should do their own work by themselves especially carrying their children because parents have responsibility to take care their own kids. to explain this point, only parents can teach their toddlers good things and also they can spend their leisure time to understand that toddlers. For instance, my uncle is a business man and my aunt is also a working woman, but in their leisure time they are take care, their children and spending time with them because of they things that this is the major responsibility in this busy schedule.

paying others for employment is good, but people should be should involve in childcare.

to conclude, hiring others for household chores is good for saving time to do your office work but in my opinion some responsibilities should remain with individual such as child care.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing employment and the necessity of personal involvement in tasks like childcare. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you provide examples, such as your sister-in-law or uncle, the analysis remains limited. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the broader societal implications of hiring help versus the psychological or developmental benefits of personal care. The position is clear, but the argument could be more nuanced and thoroughly explored to meet the requirements for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'On the first Hand' is an incorrect collocation, and the transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'who really needs job', where the pronoun 'who' does not clearly link to the intended noun. While there is an overall progression, the flow is hindered by these repetitive and sometimes awkward linking phrases.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'household course' instead of 'household chores' and 'carrying their children' instead of 'caring for their children'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations. To improve, focus on learning word families and common collocations related to work and family life. The errors do not completely impede communication, but they are noticeable throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Some people thinks'), article usage, and prepositional phrases. Punctuation is also problematic, with commas often placed incorrectly, which disrupts the rhythm of your sentences. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of these grammatical slips prevents the text from achieving a higher score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your accuracy.

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