Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this workaholic era, paying money for household work and or taking care of their children becomes usual things in majority families. However, it helps to give an employment to the person, who wants to do such kind of helps. But, as per my perspective everyone have to do by them selves these important things: nurturing their growing children as well as household works, which I will explain in details below.

Paying somebody to do such things which person do not want to do by their self is the one kind of helps to provide an employment. Because, nowadays, some of individuals becoming more educated and utilizing their day-to-day routine by doing field job instead of wasting their time to do their house keeping works or taking care of their children because they can hire the person to do these extra things by paying some amounts to them. Also, they can utilize their times to do an extra activities: gym- stay fit and healthy, business- earn extra money to live wealthy life and many more, which are the profitable point of views for those, who are not doing their routine life works such as taking care of their son or daughter as well as doing household cleaning works of every day life.

On my point of view, every individual should do such important thing by them salves, because we can not rely on rented person to take care of our children as well as clean properly our home as they are majorly depending on the wages what we are giving them, because they tends to do as much ass work as we give them money. Moreover, taking care of our baby should helps to make their lives better according to our lifestyle and they can fit to our mindset. plus, doing household chores: mops, brooms, gardening, and many more, which makes our house clean every single times and also make environment of our inside house fresh, which helps eventually our every family members' health.

Lastly, paying extra money to take care of our household works as well as nurturing our children helps to give them employment but although it affects to us eventually. So, personally I prefer to do such important works by them selves instead of relying on others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing employment and the personal responsibility of household tasks. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For instance, the argument regarding 'employment' is mentioned in the introduction, body paragraph one, and the conclusion without significant expansion. While the position is clear, the supporting arguments, particularly regarding the 'mindset' of children and the health benefits of cleaning, are slightly underdeveloped and rely on generalizations. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific, nuanced examples rather than repeating the same points in different words.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Moreover', and 'Lastly' to link your thoughts. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'plus, doing household chores' or 'but although it affects to us'. Additionally, there are issues with referencing; for example, 'by them selves' is used inconsistently, and the connection between the employment argument and the personal responsibility argument could be smoother. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'usual things in majority families' (instead of 'common in most families'), 'rented person' (instead of 'hired help' or 'domestic worker'), and 'profitable point of views'. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the phrasing often sounds unnatural. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary rather than relying on direct translations or informal phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('everyone have to do', 'they tends to do'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing ('as much ass work'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and colons. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately.

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