Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

These days, people find difficulty to balance their work and personal life. To balance it, many people hire others for their household works. Although, I believe this is a good way to provide employment to others, people should perform some duties by themselves, particularly those involving their children.

one of the main reason why people should appoint other people for their household chores is unemployment. Many people in the world are without the job, because they are not enough educated to do any kind of other job. If they get this opportunity, they can make money, and fulfill their family basic needs. For instance, In India, most of the people who are not literate are making money by helping other individuals in their household duties. Therefore, it helps to generate the employment opportunities and improve the standard of living of other low-income persons.

However, I believe people should take care of their children by themselves, nobody can understand the kids better than their parents. Some household helpers commit crime in the absence of guardians, leaving the children with a trauma. For example, there are common cases in the world, in which childcare providers do harassment with children in the absence of parents. Additionally, if people unable to do the work of their children, the kids will not have a strong connection with them, leading to have problems in their relationships in the future.

To conclude, hiring people for the household work can provide relaxation time to the busy people, while putting all the responsibility on them including children's responsibility is not good for parents and kids relationship. People should follow a balanced approach, and they should try to manage their children duties and office work, and can give rest of work to others which allows to increase employment rate.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of providing employment and the necessity of personal involvement in childcare. The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While the argument regarding employment for the uneducated is relevant, the discussion on childcare could be more nuanced. The essay tends to over-generalize, such as the claim that 'nobody can understand the kids better than their parents' or the assertion that childcare providers often commit crimes. To reach a higher band, you should provide more balanced, evidence-based reasoning rather than relying on sweeping generalizations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'However', 'Additionally', and 'To conclude', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing and flow. For example, the phrase 'one of the main reason' is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow at the start of the second paragraph. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the connection between the paragraphs could be smoother to create a more cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing for clear communication. You use some topic-specific terms like 'employment opportunities', 'standard of living', and 'guardians'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'do harassment with children' instead of 'harass children' or 'do the work of their children' instead of 'perform childcare duties'. These errors occasionally impede the natural flow of the text. Expanding your range of collocations and refining your usage of verbs would help improve your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the job', 'the household works'), subject-verb agreement ('one of the main reason'), and sentence construction ('leading to have problems'). Some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'many people in the world are without the job'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your points, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would be beneficial.

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