Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays every one has busy secdule in there life. So, it has mandatory to hire someone for domestic work as well as for taking care of babies.I have mixed views this statement. we will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, giving job as a baby seater is the the best way to unemployment, like,there are many students, who has chlid care education and the have much experience for how to take care kids. It will be so great step to earn many for them and uttilise there study on the right way. Morover. if someome having busy time they can save time to their work, beacuse, hired person can handle on their task smoothly.

On the other hand, there are alot disadvantages also accure,like distance in between parents and chlidren, If all the time they will be indulge in their job, they will not give time to their kids and it is not great way of parenting.To extend, the data has been found in canada ,that who are hireing nanny for their kids, these type of babies have lack of knowledge than others.

To conclude, Domestic work and looking for childs is most important work for everyone. If paying for somebody to this work is for short period is great. I strongly tend to opine that it should be done by their owmselves.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions by discussing paid childcare as a source of employment and the possible effect on parent–child relationships. Your conclusion also gives a position: paid help can be useful temporarily, but people should generally do these tasks themselves. However, the position is not fully clear in the introduction, which says only “I have mixed views,” and several points are asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that children cared for by nannies have “lack of knowledge” needs a clearer explanation or a relevant, credible example. The response is also below the required 250 words, so there is limited space to develop the reasons. Explain both sides more fully and state your overall view clearly from the beginning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph presenting benefits, a paragraph presenting drawbacks, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help readers follow this structure. Some connections between ideas are less clear, however. The opening of the first body paragraph moves quickly from employment to students’ childcare education and then to saving time, without fully showing how these points relate. The reference to “these type of babies” is also unclear. Use linking phrases to explain cause and effect, and make references precise. Developing each paragraph around one main idea would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “domestic work,” “child care,” “nanny,” and “parenting,” and you attempt phrases such as “save time” and “earn money.” However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “baby seater,” “uttilise,” “alot disadvantages,” and “looking for childs.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “giving job as a baby seater” and “distance in between parents and children.” Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise wording would help you express the employment and family-life arguments clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional idea in “If all the time they will be indulge in their job,” and you use clauses beginning with “who” and “that.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries occur frequently. For example, “there are many students, who has” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “they will be indulge” uses an incorrect verb form. The opening also contains incomplete or inaccurate constructions, such as “So, it has mandatory to hire someone.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a subordinate clause, and check verb forms and punctuation before submitting.

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