Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.
Is this a good way of providing work for others?
Should people do these things themselves?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this modern era the society is advancing day by day. To meet the desired goals eveybody is trying to put all thier efforts towards career development. Both the husband and wife are working and sometimes they do not have the time for household responsibilities. so, they decide to hire somebody to look after their children and other chores. I belive, this is a right decision. The person can get an extra help if the energy and focus is flowing towards other imperative things. Yes, they can get involved in household works if they have enough time and energy, but people should not drain themslves to complete all the responsibilities.
There are umpteen number of supporting points for the mind set to hire a helper. Firstly, the help can give spare time that person can invest on oneself. Somebody can meditate, can take care of their health and fitness. For example - one can get gym membership to focus on their fitness. Other than this, there will less fights and arguments in between the couple . Because, no body will be pressurised to complete other duties after finishing from stressful job settings.
Adding to this, there are several examples that why peple should not do these works by themselves. First of all, lackage of time. Now, the office jobs are getting more competetive that workers have to spend sometime on their job work when they are at home. For example- employees have to attend some online meetings when they are at home. Moreover, people will face less burnouts. After the stressful work environment they need the time when they can relax and rejuventae. If after coming back home they will see the messy home, children's unmet demads , it will make them stressful . This stress will impact their overall health.
To summarise, in my perspective hiring a help is a smart move in order to manage work-life balance. This will be win-win situation for the working families.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
Your position is clear: you support hiring help when work and other responsibilities leave people short of time or energy. You address both questions by explaining how paid help can provide employment and why families may benefit from delegating chores. The points about fitness, reduced arguments and work-related demands are relevant. However, the first question—whether this is a good way of providing work for others—is not developed as fully as the personal benefits of hiring help. For example, you could explain how paid domestic work creates income or opportunities for people seeking employment. Some claims, such as “there will less fights,” also need clearer explanation or a specific example. Developing both sides of the task more evenly would strengthen the response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs give reasons, and the conclusion restates your position. Ideas generally progress logically, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Adding to this” and “To summarise” help readers follow the argument. This organisation is effective, while some linking is mechanical or unclear. For instance, “there are several examples that why people should not do these works” does not clearly introduce the point that follows, and “Other than this” is a vague transition. The first body paragraph also shifts quickly from spare time to fitness and then arguments. Use more precise links between each claim and its explanation, and make paragraph development more consistently focused.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “career development,” “household responsibilities,” “pressurised,” “competitive” and “work-life balance.” These choices help communicate your main ideas, and you attempt less common expressions such as “imperative things” and “burnouts.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “the energy and focus is flowing,” “spare time that person can invest on oneself,” and “stressful job settings.” Spelling errors such as “eveybody,” “thier,” “competetive” and “rejuventae” also reduce accuracy. Aim for natural combinations such as “devote their energy to other priorities” and check spelling carefully; this would make your vocabulary more precise without requiring more complicated words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “if they have enough time and energy” and a reason clause beginning “Because.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in sentence structure, agreement, articles and punctuation. For example, “there will less fights” needs a verb (“there will be fewer arguments”), while “the society is advancing” and “This will be win-win situation” need more accurate article use. The sentence beginning “Because, no body…” is a fragment, and “If after coming back home they will see…” has an incorrect conditional pattern. Practise complete sentences and conditional forms, and check subject–verb agreement and punctuation. Greater control of these patterns would improve accuracy while preserving your range.
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