Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children.

Is this a good way of providing work for others?

Should people do these things themselves?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the modern era, it is common to hire someone for few task that they do not want to do because of lack of time or any other reasons and it is good for reducing unemployment while some atsk people should do by themselves because that are their responsibilties. This essay will explain my point of views with examples in forthcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, the very first reason is in whole world lots of people have not jobs or fixed income source and more people are earning good money but they do not have enough time to do their household chores such as cleaning and cooking. They can hire people who have really need of job and have experience. For instance, nowadays we are looking number of families hire a cook for their family because they working long hours and they do not have enough time for doing household chores it is also helps to jobless individuals. Therefore, it is good way to provining work to others.

In addion, some business women's have busy schedule and less time for taking care of their new born baby then they need some assistance so they hire babysitter or childcare assitant who helps to them for grew up their kid. Whereas, they also have some responsibities toward their child so they also spend some quality time with them. To exemplify, in north India number of children have week bond with their parents because they did not spend time with them and teach them some moral values. Hence, parents aslso have some reponsibilities for their kid's for making strong bond.

To conclude, In the above this essay I mentioned my views so i think people should s

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: the first body paragraph explains how hiring cooks can provide jobs, while the second recognises that parents still have responsibilities to their children. Your position is broadly that paid help can be beneficial, but people should remain involved in family duties. However, this position is not stated clearly and consistently, especially in the unfinished conclusion, “so i think people should s…”. Some support is relevant, such as the example of families working long hours, but the claim about children in North India is general and its connection to the argument needs clearer explanation. Develop each main point with a specific reason or example, and finish by directly answering both questions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding section, and the paragraphs broadly separate employment from childcare responsibilities. Linking expressions such as “For instance,” “Therefore,” and “To exemplify” help signal examples and results. However, progression within sentences is often difficult to follow, and some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from unemployment to household help without fully explaining how the arrangement benefits both parties. “Whereas” does not clearly express the relationship between the preceding point and parents’ responsibilities. The conclusion is incomplete, so it does not bring the argument to a clear close. Use simpler, more direct links between each claim, explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “household chores,” “babysitter,” “childcare assistant,” and “moral values,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “To commence with.” However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand: “for few task,” “provining work,” and “week bond” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “fixed income source” and “helps to them for grew up their kid.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than formal-sounding expressions, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “because” and “while,” and you try to explain causes and consequences. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation frequently interrupt the message. For example, “they working long hours” lacks an auxiliary, while “it is also helps” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening sentence joins several ideas without clear punctuation, and “parents aslso have some reponsibilities for their kid's” shows problems with agreement and possessive form. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause. Proofread for complete sentences and consistent verb patterns.

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