Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing to express my concern regarding to wish to stay in the apartment for longer than six months want to extend my originally agrements.

Firstly, I would like to mention that i want to extend my stay by six more months, because recently i got my promotion in my office as supervisor and also got transfer to head office in new city, due to that reason i need to make a six months of training in my office then i will moved to new city. Futhermore, i have some issues in apartment since last month that there are lot of bugs in the apartment, which i got hurt ans it was a major issue because it was getting dameges to our mattress and furniture, i request to have prest- control in apartment.

I would appreciate it if you could resolve my problem. I would also greatful if you could take necessary action to resolve this matter as soon as possible.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forwards to hearing from you.

Your faithfully,

Aryan Patel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three required points: you request a further six months, explain that a promotion and transfer require a training period, and report a pest problem while asking for pest control. These relevant details meet the task well. The explanation for the changed plans is reasonably clear, although the relationship between training and moving to the new city could be expressed more precisely. The apartment problem is also identified, but the extent of the damage and the action you expect from the owner could be explained more fully. The letter is appropriately directed to the owner and maintains a polite purpose; developing these details and making the request more specific would strengthen it further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure: an opening request, a paragraph giving reasons and describing the problem, and a polite closing. Sequencing words such as “Firstly” and “Furthermore” help signal the points, and the reader can follow the overall purpose. However, the second paragraph combines the extension, work plans, and pest issue in one long block, so the shift between topics is abrupt. Some linking is also mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “because” and “due to that reason.” Separate the explanation and apartment problem into distinct paragraphs, and use clearer transitions to show how each point relates to the request.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “promotion,” “transfer,” “training,” “mattress,” and “furniture,” so the main message is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “resolve my problem” and “take necessary action.” However, inaccurate word forms, spelling, and collocations reduce precision: “originally agrements,” “got hurt,” “dameges,” and “prest- control” are difficult or incorrect expressions. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “make a six months of training.” Check spelling and choose standard collocations for rental and maintenance requests. More precise wording would make the letter sound clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause with “because” and a relative clause beginning “which.” This shows some range, and the reader can usually understand the intended meaning. However, several sentence structures and verb forms are faulty, as in “I am writing to express my concern regarding to wish” and “then i will moved to new city.” There are also errors with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, including “a six months of training” and the long sentence joining several ideas. Practise building one clear main clause before adding reasons or extra information, and check tense consistency, articles, and punctuation. These corrections would improve control while preserving your attempts at complex sentences.

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