Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr Green,

I am writing you to enquire about the possibility of renting your apartment for longer than siw months.

If it is possible, I would like to rent your apartment for other three months or maybe only two with the same amount of money but I will understand of you raise the amount.

Unfortunetly, I have missed my appoinement with the ABC company that I have applied for a job vacancies in, and they won't orgonize any other appointement until the next month. So, I have to be in the city for the next couple of months in order to not missing the interview again.

For this occassion, I want to complain about the air conditioning in the appartement because it makes a lot of noise everytime I turn it on and It barely can cold down the living room especially with the recent heat waves.

I would deeply appreciate your immediate attention to this matter.

Yours sincerely,

Alex

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points and maintains a clear, polite purpose. You request an extension, specify that you would like to stay for two or three more months, explain that a delayed job interview means you need to remain in the city, and describe the noisy, ineffective air conditioning. These details make the request understandable and relevant. The reason for the change is supported with a specific account of the missed appointment, and the apartment problem is clearly identified. To make the response more fully developed, state the exact extension you prefer rather than offering two possibilities, and make the request for the owner to repair or inspect the air conditioner explicit. The closing is appropriate, though the complaint could be framed more tactfully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a sensible order: you introduce the request, explain the changed circumstances, raise the apartment problem, and close politely. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these purposes, and linking expressions such as “So” and “For this occasion” show an attempt to connect ideas. This gives the letter a coherent overall arrangement. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear: “For this occasion” does not naturally introduce a maintenance complaint, and the transition from the extension request to the job interview could be smoother. The first paragraph also combines the duration and rent terms in a way that makes the request less direct. Use clearer links such as “In addition” and organise each main point in its own focused paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “renting,” “appointment,” “job vacancies,” “air conditioning,” and “heat waves,” so the reader can understand the main message. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “immediate attention.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “siw,” “Unfortunetly,” “appoinement,” “orgonize,” and “occassion.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “the same amount of money” would be clearer as “the same rent,” while “barely can cold down” does not express the intended meaning naturally. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for renting and repairs; this will make your vocabulary more accurate and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes both simple statements and more complex sentences, particularly the explanation beginning “I have missed my appointment…” and the clause explaining why you need to stay in the city. The intended meaning is generally clear, and the request and complaint are communicated successfully. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “I am writing you to enquire,” the verb pattern should be “writing to you”; “I will understand of you raise” needs a different construction, such as “I would understand if you raised”; and “in order to not missing” should be “in order not to miss.” The sentence about the air conditioning also has faulty structure: “it barely can cold down” should be “it can barely cool down.” Review verb patterns, conditional forms, and infinitive constructions while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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