Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Hi John,

I hope you are doing great. I am writing this letter to request you about extend my stay in your apartment because I got a new job near your rented building.

First of all, even though I have signed on six months stay agreement, but I feel that I have every necessity in my living area from bus stops to malls, thus I actually don't have need to move somewhere else.

Moreover, not only I have every facility but also top on that I have gotten a one wonderful job with good amount of salary near to apartment. It just takes 15 minutes to go there by bus, thus I feel I should stay in same apartment.

Furthermore, there are few things which I would appreciate if you repair them. For instance, fridge and tap of washroom are not working properly. maintenance is needed for both of things.

I hope you will find my letter in good health and hope you will increase the extension of stay.

Your best wisher,

Rom.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: you requested an extension, explained your change in plans, and reported maintenance issues. However, the letter lacks a specific duration for the extension, which is a key requirement. While you mention wanting to stay longer, you do not specify how many months or a specific end date. The tone is generally appropriate for a semi-formal letter to a landlord, though it occasionally slips into slightly informal phrasing. To improve, ensure you provide concrete details for all parts of the prompt to fully satisfy the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions are used mechanically, and the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by grammatical errors. For example, the transition 'top on that' is non-standard. The paragraphing is sufficient, but the overall progression could be smoother if you varied your linking words and ensured that the logical relationship between sentences is more natural and less reliant on repetitive structures.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your needs clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'renting', 'agreement', and 'maintenance'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'request you about extend', 'good amount of salary', and 'increase the extension of stay'. These errors do not impede communication, but they demonstrate a limited range of vocabulary and some difficulty with collocation. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and precise terminology for professional requests.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include incorrect verb forms ('request you about extend'), missing articles ('the fridge', 'the tap'), and awkward sentence construction ('even though I have signed on six months stay agreement, but I feel...'). The use of 'but' after 'even though' is a common error, as these are redundant. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy of your writing.

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