Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear respected Reham,

flat #603

Karachi

Respected Sir,

This is Dainna Aslam Haider , I have been live in the apartment number 603 from six months now , as my work is near by which makes my life bit easily in this city , i don't even get late for my work recently i plan to change the apartment but during the easily way from work to home makes me think again about it.

Its bit nosily Because of the traffic but I manage and yes the water, it comes only for 15 mins every day .

thank you such for everything .

Dainna Aslam

603

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the required points. While you addressed the three bullet points—stating the desired extension, explaining the change in plans, and mentioning the water issue—the ideas are underdeveloped and lack the necessary detail to fully satisfy the task. The tone is inconsistent, and the letter structure is incomplete, lacking a formal closing. To improve, you must expand on your reasons for staying and provide more context regarding the apartment problem to ensure the letter is sufficiently detailed and professional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear logical progression. The sentences are somewhat disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal or inaccurate, such as the abrupt transition between the reason for staying and the mention of the apartment problems. Paragraphing is not effectively used to separate the different points of the letter. To improve, you should use linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'however' to connect your ideas more smoothly and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed point.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic structures. Phrases like 'makes my life bit easily' and 'easily way' are grammatically incorrect and demonstrate a lack of control over word choice and collocation. There is little attempt to use more sophisticated or precise language suitable for a formal request. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied vocabulary, such as 'convenient' instead of 'easily' and 'prolong my tenancy' instead of 'stay in the apartment for longer'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I have been live' (should be 'I have been living'), 'makes my life bit easily' (should be 'makes my life a bit easier'), and 'I don't even get late' (should be 'I am not late'). The sentence structures are mostly simple and contain errors that occasionally impede the flow of communication. You need to focus on subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and the proper use of adjectives and adverbs to improve the accuracy and complexity of your writing.

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