Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Respected Owner,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to request for the extending my contract from six months to two years due to my working requirements.

As this apartment is just 20 mins far away from my job location as well as according to my job letter I have to work for five days a week in office that's why it is quite convinent for me to commute there. Moreover, there are plenty of facilities providing in this apartment, such as shopping complex , departmental stores and park on the walking distance.

Although an apartment offering various facilities, I am facing the some issues. One of them is finding a empty parking spot for a car as most of the times, another apartment members park more than one car.

It is my humble request to expand my contact and I am waiting for your response.

Thanks you

Gurpreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: the duration of the extension, the reason for the change, and the parking issue. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. While you mention your job requirements, the explanation is slightly repetitive and lacks a professional tone. The request to extend the contract is clear, but the tone is inconsistent, shifting between formal and slightly informal phrasing. To reach a higher band, ensure that the purpose of the letter is stated more clearly in the opening and that the tone remains consistently professional throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Although' to link ideas. However, the transition between the request for extension and the parking problem is a bit abrupt. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'another apartment members', which is grammatically awkward. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would improve the flow and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to complete the task, such as 'commute', 'facilities', and 'requirements'. However, there are several instances of unnatural word choice and collocation errors, such as 'request for the extending', '20 mins far away', and 'on the walking distance'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do highlight a lack of precision. To improve, focus on learning common collocations related to renting and professional correspondence, and pay closer attention to prepositions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('a empty parking spot'), pluralization ('another apartment members'), and verb forms ('facilities providing'). Some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'I am writing this letter to request for the extending my contract'. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of gerunds after prepositions.

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