Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Owner,

I hope you are in good spirits. I am writing this letter you to discuss about my lease agreement which is about to close in the next month. I signed lease five months ago and now I want to extend this agreement for two years for some reasons.

The first reason is my college which is close to my apartment and easily accessible to transportation. Also, After graduation, I am thinking to expand my business in Moncton Downtown so this place provides all facilities nearby. On top of that, the whole space is quite cozy and comfortable that aligns my interest and also fits into my budget.

However, there is only one issue that I am currently dealing is loud music which sometimes causes problem of sleeping. Otherwise, I am very much interested to upgrade my lease.

I am sincerely apologize to inform you at last moment. I hope, you would consider my situation and reply me shortly.

Regards and Thanks

Manpreet kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: you specified the duration of the extension (two years), explained the reasons (proximity to college and business expansion), and mentioned a problem (loud music). The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a landlord. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific details about the 'loud music' issue, such as the time of day it occurs or the source of the noise, to make your request more persuasive and realistic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'The first reason', 'Also', and 'On top of that' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. For instance, the transition in the final paragraph is slightly abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'this place', 'this agreement') is always clear will help improve the overall flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'lease agreement', 'accessible', and 'expand my business'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'discuss about' (which should be 'discuss') and 'causes problem of sleeping' (which should be 'causes sleeping problems'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over common collocations. Expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated phrases related to housing and formal requests would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I am sincerely apologize' (should be 'I sincerely apologize' or 'I am writing to sincerely apologize') and 'reply me' (should be 'reply to me'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors throughout the text. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions after verbs.

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