Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. John,

Hope you are doing well. I am writing to inform you about my wish to stay in apartment for longer than six months.

First and foremost, with regards to longer stay, I would like to appreciate that the apartment facility you have provide is working excellent for me and due to my job easy accesibility and reliability has increase, I might need to extend my period of stay against what I had agreed to earlier.

Furthermore, Concerning about the hydro power issue that its not functioning properly because the water pipe inside the wall has been clogged. Due to which the force is not as flow as expected.

To resolve this situation, I would appreciate if you could help us in fixing this issue as soon as possible. However, I have a friend who is plumber. If u request, I can aske him to take out solution for this in less price than the market offers.

Thank you for your prompt attention to this matter.

Sincerely,

David

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state your intention to extend the lease, explain the change in plans due to job accessibility, and describe the plumbing issue. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a landlord. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation regarding the 'hydro power' issue is slightly confusing and lacks clarity. To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanations are fully developed and logically connected to the reader's perspective. Overall, the task is fulfilled, and the purpose of the letter is clear.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices such as 'First and foremost' and 'Furthermore' to transition between ideas. However, some connections are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as the transition into the plumbing issue. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus. The structure is sufficient to convey your message effectively, but it lacks the sophisticated flow required for higher bands.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'accessibility,' 'reliability,' and 'prompt attention.' However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'working excellent' (should be 'working excellently'), 'hydro power issue' (likely meant 'plumbing' or 'water pressure'), and 'take out solution' (should be 'find a solution'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do highlight a need for more precise usage. Expanding your vocabulary to include more natural collocations would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'facility you have provide' (should be 'provided'), 'reliability has increase' (should be 'increased'), and 'If u request' (informal abbreviation and incorrect verb form). Additionally, the sentence 'Due to which the force is not as flow as expected' is grammatically incorrect. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses will help improve your accuracy.

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