Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

How was your day and business, hope letter meet you well ?am writing in respect to my apartment that i rented for half of year which expires in the couple months. i would like to retain my apartment for the next 12 months, due to unexpected factors.

Currently, my company just re established an additional one year contract my with me. Hence it is necessary i retain my apartment to enable my stay for another period of one year.

However sir, i would like you to carryout some repairs in my apartment, presently my apartment sink is linking and my bedroom wall socket is bad i would like send a technician to come and checkmate to make a replacement. please, communicate when the technician is coming around in other for me to make out time to be available at home.

i am looking forward to hearing from you and also in expectant to see a technician.

yours faithfully,

James

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: stating the desired extension length, explaining the reason for the change, and reporting the maintenance issues. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a landlord. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. For instance, while you mention the sink is 'linking' (leaking) and the socket is 'bad', providing a bit more detail or a more formal request for action would have strengthened the response. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the requirements are met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Hence' to connect ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'in other for me to make out time'. Additionally, the opening sentence is a bit informal and disjointed. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would help move your score higher. Overall, the message is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are several instances of inaccurate word choice or spelling errors. For example, you used 'linking' instead of 'leaking', 'checkmate' instead of 'check', and 'in expectant' instead of 'in expectation'. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, but they do indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage. To improve, focus on learning common collocations related to home maintenance and professional correspondence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

Your writing shows a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'half of year' (should be 'half a year'), 're established' (should be 're-established'), and 'my with me' (unnecessary word). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'). While these errors are frequent, they do not impede communication. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent capitalization.

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