Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Mr.jack.

How are you. I hope you are doing well. I write a letter for talk about apartment. I want to apartment for a long time. Because my job is nearby and also my daughter’s schools are closed in the apartment. I understand your policy but suddenly my plan changed. So you understand my situation.

Also I consider the some problem of apartment some time water licking into the ceiling. And stove top is not working properly. So,iconsider this problem as solved soon as possible.

I mentioned one thing that is very important for cleaning up.

Sincerely Deval.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While all three bullet points are addressed (duration, reasons for change, and apartment problems), the content is underdeveloped and lacks the necessary detail to fully satisfy the task. The explanation for the change in plans is vague, and the description of the maintenance issues is brief. To improve, you must expand on your ideas, providing more context and specific details to ensure the letter is fully developed and meets the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is very short, which makes it difficult to demonstrate a range of cohesive devices. The paragraphing is inconsistent, and the flow between sentences is often abrupt. While the basic structure of a letter is present, the lack of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') makes the writing feel disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of transition words to connect your ideas logically and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'I write a letter for talk about' and 'consider the some problem' are unnatural and indicate a limited range of expression. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'licking' instead of 'leaking' and 'closed' instead of 'close to'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary appropriate for a formal request, such as 'extend my tenancy', 'maintenance issues', or 'rectify the situation'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammar is frequently inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. There are consistent errors in verb tense ('I write a letter'), article usage ('the some problem'), and sentence structure ('I want to apartment'). The sentences are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex structures. Punctuation is also problematic, particularly the misuse of periods and the lack of proper sentence boundaries. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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