Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Jones,

My name is Shubham Savaliya. I am writing this letter to request you about extension of my renting agreement at your apartment, which is located in Delhi. You provided an overall good facilities into your apartment. So that, I feel grateful to stay over here.

As earlier, I have done a six-month agreement to stay at your apartment, but unfortunately now, I have to stay till one year. These extension is required because of my job that has to do till 1 year in Delhi.

Initially, I thought that i will change the city after six-month, but now, my company has promoted me to the higher position with desirable increment. So that, I changed my decision overnight to move into another city.

Although, there are various hurdles that I am facing into your apartment. The drainage system is not working properly. Additionally, some bulbs are constantly blinking all the days. So, it is required to be overcome all these issues by a plumber and an electrician. So, I kindly request you to look into it.

Thank you for your cooperation. I am looking for your response.

Thanks and Regards,

Shubham Savaliya

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points: the duration of the extension, the reason for the change in plans, and the maintenance issues. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a landlord. However, the development of ideas is slightly repetitive, particularly in the second and third paragraphs where the reason for staying is explained. To improve, ensure that each paragraph adds distinct information rather than restating the same point. The purpose of the letter is clear from the beginning, and the reader is left in no doubt about your requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the task. Cohesive devices such as 'Although', 'Additionally', and 'So that' are used to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or misused, such as 'So that' at the start of sentences, which is grammatically incorrect in this context. The progression of ideas is generally smooth, but the use of referencing could be more precise to improve the flow between sentences. Overall, the structure is easy to follow and serves the purpose of the communication well.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'extension', 'agreement', 'hurdles', and 'increment'. There are some instances of awkward word choice or collocation, such as 'request you about extension' (should be 'request an extension') and 'do not need to write any addresses' (which was an instruction, not part of the letter). Some phrasing is slightly unnatural, like 'has to do till 1 year'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over collocations and formal register.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I have done a six-month agreement' (should be 'I signed a six-month agreement'), 'These extension is required' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'it is required to be overcome all these issues' (awkward passive construction). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but there are minor errors in article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. Increasing your control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement will help raise your score.

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