Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Rehmat,

I am writing this letter to request you about the extension of stay in your apartment by revising the renting agreement.

Before that, I was planning to move on my friend's house, but I am a very social and was looking for volunteer job. Finally, I got a chance to work in a charity organisation that is working for the children suffering from terminal diseases like cancers, leukemia and thalassemia. Most of the children are at the last stage of their lives, might not able to see their next birthdays. the location of organisation is just five minutes drive from current apartment.

I really enjoyed the whole time period i spent here except the AC ventilator of my kitchen is not working properly. It creates heat in this area while cooking. It is requested that please fix this issue as soon as possible so that I can also make some extra food for charity kitchen.

Thank you in advance.

Sincerely,

Iram Shahnaz

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: you requested an extension, explained your change in plans, and reported a maintenance issue. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a landlord. However, the letter lacks a clear statement regarding the specific duration of the extension you are requesting (e.g., 'I would like to extend my stay for another six months'). Providing specific details is essential for task completion. Additionally, the explanation regarding your volunteer work is slightly over-detailed, which distracts from the primary purpose of the letter. To improve, ensure all requirements are addressed with specific, actionable information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat limited and occasionally mechanical. For example, the transition between your volunteer work and the apartment issue is abrupt. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'might not able to see their next birthdays,' where the subject is missing. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' 'in addition to this') would help create a smoother flow between your ideas and improve the overall structure of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message, such as 'charity organisation' and 'terminal diseases.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For instance, 'request you about' is incorrect; it should be 'request an extension from you.' Additionally, 'AC ventilator' is not the standard term for a kitchen exhaust fan or range hood. While your meaning is generally clear, the vocabulary is somewhat basic and lacks the precision required for higher band scores. Focusing on learning common collocations related to housing and formal requests would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'I am a very social and was looking for volunteer job' (missing article and incorrect adjective usage) and 'might not able to see' (missing auxiliary verb). There are also punctuation and capitalization issues, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters. While these errors do not completely prevent understanding, they are frequent enough to lower the score. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and proofreading for basic sentence construction errors.

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