Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the contemporary epoch, there is an argument over the issue that, there is no fleck of doubt over the issue that, majority of society favor it, the following paragraph would highlight my perspective which will lead to a logical conclusion, I did agreement for six month for flat owner, because my plan was for just six month for leave there, but after six month my plan have become changed, because I want leave there some for long time there, because this purpose I get this flat, my work have had some long for term, that's why I did changed own plan, and I want change own plan, and I want grow own agreement from own owner, for some long specific time, because it is very necessary for me, and I have some problem in these flat, like problem of water similarly I have some problem in electricity, so I want plz set these problem for me, so that I could leave there easily.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all three bullet points: the duration of the extension, the reason for the change in plans, and the maintenance issues. However, the tone is inappropriate for a formal letter to a landlord. The opening paragraph is entirely irrelevant, consisting of memorized, generic phrases that do not relate to the task. The development of ideas is hindered by the lack of formal structure and the inclusion of this 'filler' text. To improve, you should focus on a direct, professional tone suitable for a business correspondence and ensure all content is relevant to the specific request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks proper paragraphing and logical progression. It is written as a single, long, run-on sentence, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices; instead, the text relies heavily on the repetitive use of 'because' and 'and' to link clauses. This creates a mechanical and disjointed flow. To achieve a higher score, you must organize your ideas into distinct paragraphs (e.g., one for the request, one for the explanation, and one for the maintenance issues) and use a wider variety of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'however'.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'my plan have become changed' and 'grow own agreement' are unnatural and indicate a lack of control over collocations. The use of 'fleck of doubt' and 'contemporary epoch' is highly inappropriate for this context, as these are academic clichés that do not fit a letter to a landlord. You need to focus on using standard, functional language for letter writing, such as 'extend my lease', 'contract', 'maintenance', and 'urgent repairs'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is significantly flawed, with frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Examples include 'I did agreement', 'my plan have become changed', and 'I want grow own agreement'. The entire response is essentially one long, unpunctuated sentence, which severely impacts readability. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures used correctly. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of past and present tenses.

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