Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.
Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter
- say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
- explain why your plans have changed
- tell the owner about a problem in the apartment
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Dear sir hope you are doing well, i just want to tell you that i am going to live more 3months in the appartment, i know the aggrement my just for 6month but my family from indan is going to come in uk in fews days so i need place where i live with my family you may make next 3 month aggrement and there are some issue with bathroom everytime i use the washroom its flash stucks and the door of bathroom is also make alot noise could you please fix this things up i will be very greatfull to you and please if you can then make this things fix im few days because in next week my family is going to come and j want everything good before they come here and i will clear my rent in 2 days so we start eveything new for next 3 months your thank you.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully state that you wish to rent the apartment for an additional three months, explain that your plans have changed because your family from India is coming to the UK, and mention problems with the bathroom, specifically the flushing mechanism and the noisy door. However, the tone and organization are quite conversational, and the ideas are presented in a single long paragraph rather than well-structured sections. While all task requirements are met, the lack of paragraphing means the ideas are not fully developed or extended. This corresponds to a Band 6.0 performance under Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The entire text is written as one continuous run-on sentence without proper punctuation or paragraph breaks. Phrases like 'i just want to tell you' and 'and there are some issue' string clauses together with commas rather than full stops, making the reading process difficult. Although there is a chronological progression from your initial request to the reasons behind it, the maintenance of cohesion is faulty due to the complete absence of periods, capital letters for new sentences, and paragraphing. There is an over-reliance on the conjunction 'and'. This aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptor for cohesion and paragraphing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, such as 'live', 'come', 'make', and 'things'. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, including 'appartment' instead of apartment, 'aggrement' instead of agreement, 'indan' instead of India, 'fews days' instead of few days, and 'greatfull' instead of grateful. While the meaning remains generally understandable, the limited range of vocabulary and frequent spelling errors prevent the writing from achieving a higher band. This reflects a Band 5.0 level for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response consists almost entirely of a single, run-on sentence joined by commas. There is a complete lack of standard sentence boundaries, capitalisation, and punctuation. Grammatical errors are very frequent, such as 'my just for 6month' instead of 'was just for 6 months', 'is going to come in uk' instead of 'to the UK', 'flash stucks' instead of 'the flush sticks', and 'door... is also make' instead of 'makes'. The structural range is extremely limited, relying on simple clauses linked by coordinating conjunctions. This warrants a Band 4.0 for grammatical range and accuracy.
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