Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

mr dhillion

i rented your apartment ago 5 months and we do the six months aggrement but now i want to change my plan i want to stay at this place for long time because its easy for me .

the reason for staying long time is work because my work is near to this place and i easily go to my work and i easily arrived at home its very benificial for me because its save my time alot and in that time i completed my all pending works.

please understand the my situation and try to agree with my point

your faithfully

jaspinderjeet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response covers some of the required bullet points, mentioning how long the student wants to rent the apartment for and explaining the change in plans due to work proximity. However, the third bullet point regarding a problem in the apartment is entirely omitted. Furthermore, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 106 words. According to the task achievement descriptors, failing to address all parts of the prompt and failing the length requirement limits the score to Band 4.0. To improve, the writer must ensure every bullet point in the prompt is fully addressed and write at least the minimum required word count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The letter lacks proper paragraphing, being written as a single block of text or poorly separated clauses without capitalisation. There is an absence of logical progression and cohesive devices; ideas run together using repetitive conjunctions and run-on sentences, such as 'my work is near to this place and i easily go to my work and i easily arrived at home'. Referencing is unclear and punctuation is largely neglected throughout the response. These features align with Band 4.0 descriptors for coherence and cohesion. The writer needs to learn how to structure a letter into clear paragraphs and use appropriate cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to everyday terms, such as 'nice', 'place', 'work', and 'time'. There are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'we do the six months aggrement' instead of 'signed a six-month agreement', and unnatural phrasing like 'benificial for me because its save my time alot'. The limited range and frequent errors cause some strain for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0. To achieve a higher score, the student should expand their lexical range and practice natural collocations related to renting and accommodation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple clauses strung together with coordinating conjunctions. There is a complete lack of punctuation, including missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and proper nouns, as well as missing apostrophes. Frequent errors, such as run-on sentences and incorrect verb tenses ('we do' instead of 'we signed' or 'we agreed'), distort meaning and make the text difficult to parse. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 rating. The writer needs to focus on sentence boundaries, punctuation rules, and mastering complex grammatical structures.

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