Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear,

Hye this is Muhammad Asad, I am living in your appartment located in bosten i have taken this apartment for six months this time is now about to end,

I am writing this latter to you to keep this appartment for forther more six months i was planing latter to move in other city called london so therefor i am writing you this latter to please allaow me for next six months forthermore stay and extend the aggriment.

insted of finish the previous aggriment i wish youmay allow me for next six months more to stay in the said appartment,

I have changed my plan to leave this city becouse of the weather i heard about the next city where i was planing to move is now facing the very harsh weather.

And one more thing which i want to konw you is that the heater of the kitchen is not working properly it is out of order and i want you to cheak on this and replase this with new one.

Muhammad Asad

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task. You clearly mention how long you wish to rent the apartment for by stating you want to stay for 'forther more six months'. You also explain your change of plans regarding the move to London due to harsh weather in that city, and you inform the owner about a problem with the kitchen heater. However, some ideas are more fully developed than others; for instance, the explanation regarding the weather and the request for the extension are somewhat repetitive, and the mention of the broken heater is rather abrupt and under-developed. Nevertheless, all bullet points are covered adequately for this level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text demonstrates a basic overall arrangement, but cohesion is often faulty and mechanical. The letter lacks proper paragraphing, as it is presented almost as a single continuous block of text with inadequate separation of ideas. Furthermore, cohesive devices are largely missing or inaccurate, and referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the repetitive use of 'this latter' and run-on sentences connected loosely with commas rather than appropriate conjunctions or full stops. To improve, you need to organise your ideas into distinct paragraphs for each bullet point and use a wider range of logical connectors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary range is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message despite noticeable errors. You attempt some less common vocabulary, such as 'aggriment' and 'appartment', but these contain spelling errors. There are also instances of awkward word choice and collocation, such as 'keep this appartment' instead of 'renew my lease' or 'extend my tenancy', and 'cheak on this and replase this'. While these spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, they do not seriously impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence forms, such as conditional or dependent clauses, but these are often faulty. There are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, including missing capitalisation ('bosten', 'london'), incorrect verb tenses ('I am living', 'I was planing latter to move'), and run-on sentences due to a lack of proper punctuation and full stops. While these errors occur regularly throughout the text, the meaning remains mostly clear and communication is rarely impeded.

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