Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Ali,

I hope you are fine.I want to discuss abou apartment where i live past 6 months ago. I like it very much.The apartment is very beautiful and clean.First off all, i want to tell you that i am very interested in living in your apartment for more 6 months.I want to make aggrement of more than 6 months.In this apartment i see the many goods things like carpet and TV that's give me more interst in your apartment.There are two rooms and windows of each room is very flexible.I saw the view of beautiful green lands and farms nearby me and i enjoy this view during the boring time so i decide to take this apartment more 6 months.I will pay you as u want.There is only one problem.The electricity off during my study time please set the routine of electricity.I want to take this apartment as a rental.

Yours Customer

Muhammad Fahad

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the main purpose by asking to rent for “more 6 months,” giving a reason for staying, and mentioning an electricity problem. The attractive view and the apartment’s features provide some relevant explanation for your decision. However, the requested duration is not expressed precisely, and the reason for your changed plans is not clearly distinguished from general praise of the apartment. The problem is also unclear: “The electricity off during my study time” does not explain whether power cuts occur regularly or what action you want the owner to take. Develop these points directly and make the request explicit—for example, specify the new end date and ask for the electricity supply or schedule to be checked.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter follows a broadly sensible order: it introduces the apartment, requests an extension, gives reasons, and then raises a problem. Basic links such as “First off all” and “There is only one problem” help the reader identify these stages. However, most information is placed in one continuous paragraph, so the separate purposes of the letter are not clearly organised. Several ideas also run together, particularly the description of the apartment and the explanation for staying. Some connections are difficult to follow, as in “so i decide to take this apartment more 6 months.” Use separate paragraphs for the extension and reasons, then the maintenance issue, and connect each idea with clear, accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough everyday vocabulary to communicate the basic subject, including “apartment,” “agreement,” “view,” and “electricity.” Details such as “green lands and farms” help make your reason for staying more specific. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the message harder to understand: “more 6 months,” “many goods things,” and “set the routine of electricity” are not natural expressions in this context. Spelling and word-form errors such as “aggrement” and “interst” also reduce precision. Build a small set of formal rental-letter phrases and check spelling; more accurate expressions will make your request clearer and more appropriate for writing to a landlord.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response mainly uses simple sentences and attempts a few longer structures, such as “I saw the view … and i enjoy this view … so i decide.” These attempts show an effort to connect ideas, but control is inconsistent. Errors include tense and verb forms (“i decide” for a past decision), subject–verb agreement (“windows of each room is”), missing articles or prepositions (“discuss abou apartment”), and sentence boundaries (“I hope you are fine.I want…”). Capitalisation of “I” and punctuation are also inconsistent. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear, especially in the sentence about the electricity. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using correctly formed clauses and consistent past or present tenses.

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