Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Apartment owner,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this later to thank you for giving me your aparment as a rental for six months contract ; you gave me an apartment to stay when I was really in need of house,These six months was really greatfull here,I felt like my own place,now I am use to with this flate.Next month my contract will going to finish.I am really worried about that, that it was very difficult for me to search for new place.

So that I want to request to extent my contract for renting apartment.For these procedure whatever you need I will ready to provide you.

If you need anything from me feel free to contact me.

Thank you so much again.

Yours,

Asma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You establish the purpose of the letter by saying you want to extend the rental, and you explain that finding another place would be difficult. However, the response only partly fulfils the task: it does not say how much longer you want to stay, and it omits the required information about a problem in the apartment. The reason for your changed plans is also brief and could be explained more clearly. The letter contains 129 words, so it is 21 words below the required minimum; this leaves little room to develop the missing points. To improve, state a specific extension period, explain why your circumstances have changed, and describe the apartment problem and its effect.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you thank the owner, describe your attachment to the apartment, make a request, and close politely. This gives the reader a basic sense of purpose. However, most of the content is placed in one long paragraph, and several ideas run together, particularly the opening sentences. The transition “So that” is not used naturally to introduce the request, while “If you need anything from me” does not clearly connect to the missing details of the extension. Use separate paragraphs for the background, your request and the apartment problem, and connect each point with straightforward transitions such as “As a result” or “I would also like to report.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant language for a rental letter, including “rental,” “contract,” “extend my contract,” and “contact you.” The reader can generally understand that you value the apartment and want to remain there. However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make the message less clear or natural, such as “aparment,” “greatfull,” “flate,” and “use to with.” Some phrases are also awkward for this context, including “giving me your apartment as a rental” and “for these procedure.” Choose accurate, conventional expressions such as “renting the apartment,” “I have grown accustomed to living here,” and “regarding the extension.” Proofreading spelling and collocations would make the letter more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining that the apartment feels like your own place and that finding another home would be difficult. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries are frequent enough to affect clarity. Examples include “These six months was,” “I am use to,” and “my contract will going to finish.” The opening also joins several clauses with commas, creating a run-on sentence. Use simpler, complete sentences where needed, and check subject–verb agreement and verb patterns: for example, “The six months have been…” and “My contract will end next month.”

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