Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

dear sir,

hope you are doing good. five months ago, i have rented this apartment for six months as an aggrement, and the apartment is very nice also its in the center of the city and i can go to market or my university on bike and i dont have any probelm reaching where evr i want, i am writing this to let you know that i want to stay more at your apartment as originally agreed with you,

i hope that you are satisfied with me and i am paying my rent timely.

kindly if i can stay longer in this apartment.

regards

anna

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify that you want to remain in the apartment and give relevant reasons, including its central location and convenient access to the market and university. However, the response only partially addresses the task: it does not say how much longer you wish to rent, explain what has changed in your plans, or mention any problem in the apartment. The request, “if i can stay longer,” is also too vague to establish a clear proposal. The response is 105 words, below the required minimum of 150, which leaves little room to develop the missing points. To improve, state a specific extension, explain the change in your circumstances, and describe the apartment problem and its effect.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable opening, a main message, and a closing, and the ideas about the apartment’s location and your rent payments are relevant to your request. However, most information is packed into one long paragraph, so the letter has limited progression and the key request is not clearly separated from the supporting details. The sequence “i am writing this to let you know…” followed by “i hope that you are satisfied…” does not develop the explanation of your changed plans. The final request is also a fragment rather than a clearly connected sentence. Use separate paragraphs for the extension request, your reasons, and the apartment problem, with clear links between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough everyday vocabulary to communicate basic information, including “apartment,” “center of the city,” “university,” and “paying my rent timely.” The wording is generally understandable, but the range is limited and some choices are inaccurate or informal for a letter to a landlord. For example, “doing good” is less suitable than a polite expression such as “I hope you are well,” while “stay more” does not clearly express extending a rental agreement. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “aggrement,” “probelm,” and “evr.” Use more precise rental vocabulary and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your message uses some connected sentence forms, such as the sentence explaining that the apartment is central and convenient, but the range is limited and errors recur. In “five months ago, i have rented,” the past-time expression calls for a past-tense form, and “as originally agreed with you” is attached awkwardly to the request. The sentence beginning “kindly if i can stay longer” is incomplete and needs a main clause, such as “Could you please let me know if I can stay longer?” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly the lowercase “i” and the long sentence joined mainly with “and.” Practise accurate past-tense forms and complete, clearly punctuated sentences.

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