Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Alex,

I would really happy if you could arrange meeting with me regarding to increase more stay rather than six month in your apartment.

Alex, I love my comfort space and I want more than 2 year lease agreement for your rentened house.

My plans have changed because my work distance not too far from my home. Also, In this condo all amenities avaliable such as swimming pool, playgroud, gym and restaurtant that i love the most.

I have only one obstacle in their and that is parking space, because management allow owner to park their vehicle instead of tentant. I would really appericate to you alex if you will talk to staff give me rented parking that would helpful for me.

I hope you consider my letter and we will catch up soon with your favourity dinnig restaurant.

your faithfully,

Bhawna

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three required points: you request a longer stay, explain that your work is nearby and that you value the apartment’s facilities, and describe the parking problem. However, the request is not fully clear: “more than 2 year lease agreement” does not specify a precise duration, and the parking issue is framed mainly as a request for help rather than a clear explanation of the problem. The reason for changing plans is relevant but could be developed more clearly. The response is also 7 words below the required minimum, so it needs a little more detail. State the exact extension you want and explain how the parking restriction affects you.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a generally understandable order: you make the request, give reasons, raise the parking issue, and close politely. Paragraph breaks help separate these points. Some links between ideas are mechanical or unclear, however. For example, “Also, In this condo” introduces the amenities, but the connection between these facilities and your decision to stay could be made more explicit. “I have only one obstacle in their” also makes the shift to the parking problem difficult to follow. Repeatedly addressing the owner as “Alex” interrupts the flow. Use clear paragraphing and simple transitions, while making references such as “there” or “this issue” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “lease agreement,” “amenities,” “parking space,” and “management,” so the main message can be understood. However, a number of spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, such as “rentened,” “avaliable,” “playgroud,” “restaurtant,” and “appericate.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “increase more stay” and “rented parking.” These errors make the letter less clear and polished, although the vocabulary is sufficient to communicate its basic purpose. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for renting, extending a lease, and requesting a parking space.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes some longer sentence attempts, particularly when explaining your reasons and describing the parking restriction, but control is inconsistent. Errors include the missing verb in “I would really happy,” the incorrect construction “regarding to increase,” and the sentence “management allow owner to park their vehicle,” which has problems with agreement and articles. The closing “if you will talk to staff give me rented parking” also needs clearer clause structure. Most ideas remain understandable, but these errors sometimes make the reader work to interpret the message. Practise accurate request forms, such as “I would be grateful if you could…,” and check articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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