Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

I am writing to express my intention to extend my stay at your apartment. As decided earlier, I was supposed to be accommodated for six months only as per the tenancy agreement, but I want to increase it to one year considering my current professional requirements.

I recently got promoted to a higher position of a district supervisor at my company, and for that, I am required to continue working at the Mississauga location only. My office being closer to my home, it is most convenient for me to resume staying at this place instead of looking out for another dwelling. Also, this home has been fortunate enough for me; I got promoted, and it also offers me a peaceful, vibrant environment.

I have a request if you could you please arrange a parking spot for me, as I might have to buy a car, looking at the demands of my job, where I need to travel to various locations for inspection. I hope you will consider my requirement and take the necessary steps.

I look forward to hearing from you soon. I hope you have a great weekend ahead!

Yours faithfully,

Nav.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The letter clearly requests an extension and gives a reason: the promotion means you must remain at the Mississauga location. However, the requested rental period is not fully clear. “I want to increase it to one year” could mean one year in total or one additional year, so state the exact end date or duration beyond the original agreement. The apartment problem is also not actually described: asking for a parking spot because you may need a car is a request for an added facility, rather than reporting a problem with the apartment. This leaves an important task point unaddressed and limits the development of the response. Explain a specific existing issue and ask the owner to resolve it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter is arranged in a sensible sequence: it opens with the extension request, explains the change in circumstances, raises a further request, and closes politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these purposes, and links such as “Also” and “I look forward to hearing from you” make the progression easy to follow. Some connections could be more precise. For example, the parking request is introduced as a separate matter, but it does not clearly fulfil the instruction to report a problem in the apartment. The sentence about the home being “fortunate enough” also interrupts the explanation of why you wish to stay. Keep each paragraph focused on one task point and make the relationship between the job change and the requested rental period explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a reasonably varied range, including “tenancy agreement,” “professional requirements,” “district supervisor,” and “peaceful, vibrant environment.” These choices communicate the situation clearly and show some flexibility beyond basic vocabulary. However, several expressions are unnatural or imprecise for a formal letter: “be accommodated” suggests temporary lodging, “resume staying” is not the natural way to describe continuing a tenancy, and “this home has been fortunate enough for me” does not convey your intended meaning clearly. “Looking at the demands of my job” is also an awkward collocation. Choose direct, conventional phrases for renting and explain the practical benefit of remaining in the apartment without relying on unclear wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

The response shows a good range of sentence forms, including subordinate clauses (“as I might have to buy a car”) and a reason clause (“as per the tenancy agreement”). Many sentences are controlled and easy to understand. A few errors remain, which is consistent with this level of performance. In “I have a request if you could you please arrange,” the repeated “you” makes the clause ungrammatical; write “I would like to ask whether you could arrange…” instead. “My office being closer to my home, it is most convenient…” is an awkwardly constructed sentence, and “I want to increase it to one year” leaves the reference of “it” unclear. Proofread for duplicated words and make sentence relationships explicit.

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