Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir

I am writing this letter to express my concern regarding extension of my agreeement for rented apartment which was for six month and soon it will expire. I want to increase it for 6 more months.

Moreover,I want to extent this because i got promotion in my job and they also promised me for my pr support. I was worried about my status or work in this province thats why initially i decide to make contract for 6 months. However , now everything is good .

Furthermore , i found this place really spacious and exellent for my mental heath because it is very quite .so i have decided to stay more longer.

I wauld appriciate it if you accepted my request.

your sencierly

megha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You make the main request clear: you want to extend the rental by six months, and you explain that your job promotion and promised permanent-residency support have changed your plans. However, the task is only partially addressed because you do not mention any problem in the apartment, despite this being a required point. The reason for your original six-month agreement is included, but the explanation could be clearer and more fully developed. The response is also 23 words below the required minimum, leaving little space to cover all points adequately. Add a specific apartment problem and explain what action you would like the owner to take, then close with a complete, polite request.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a generally understandable sequence: you state your request, explain the change in your circumstances, and add why you like the apartment. Paragraph breaks help separate these ideas, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “However” show attempts to connect information. At times, though, the progression feels mechanical, with “Furthermore” introducing another reason rather than developing the previous point. Punctuation and spacing also interrupt the flow, as in “Moreover,I” and “quite .so.” To improve, organise the letter into clear paragraphs for the request, changed plans, and apartment issue, and use transitions that show the precise relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “promotion,” “contract,” “status,” and “spacious,” so the reader can understand the main circumstances and your positive view of the apartment. There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “agreeement,” “extent,” “exellent,” and “sencierly,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the letter. Some phrases are not natural in this context: “increase it” would be clearer as “extend the agreement,” and “stay more longer” is awkward. Build a small set of accurate rental-letter expressions, such as “renew the lease” and “request an extension,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, for example, “I was worried about my status or work in this province, that’s why initially I decide to make contract for 6 months.” This shows an effort to explain cause and contrast, but several sentence patterns need more control. Tense shifts occur in “I decide” after “I was worried,” and articles are missing in phrases such as “for rented apartment” and “make contract.” The sentence joining the worry and the decision also needs clearer punctuation or a conjunction. The closing is not formed as a complete conventional sign-off. Practise accurate past-tense explanations and article use, then proofread sentence boundaries and punctuation.

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