Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Hlo Mr Singh,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to tell you that I would like to live in the same apartment more than 6 months. I know very well firstly I agreed to live here for just 6 months.

Actually, I love this place because of the peaceful environment, helpful neighbours and all facilities avialable near the home. That's why I want to extend my agrement paper, can you please provide me details when we will meet and complete all the necessary formalities done.

Last month I also looked at the another flat but there are some problems owing to this I will cancel to stay there. firstly, it was very far from my work place, secondly a lot noise occur due to the busy city area.

I hope you understand it. Thank you for your time and I am look forward for your response.

Best regards,

AVc

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make the main purpose clear: you want to remain in the apartment beyond the original six-month agreement, and you explain that you value its peaceful surroundings, helpful neighbours and nearby facilities. However, the request is not fully addressed because you never say how much longer you want to rent it for. The explanation about viewing another flat is relevant to your changed plans, but the connection between that visit and your decision to extend is not clearly developed. Most importantly, the required apartment problem is missing: the noise and distance you describe are problems with the other flat, not your current home. Include a specific issue in this apartment and state a definite extension period to make the letter complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a generally understandable sequence: you introduce your request, give reasons for staying, explain why another flat was unsuitable, and close politely. Paragraphing helps separate these points, and connectors such as “Actually,” “That’s why,” and “secondly” show how ideas relate. Some links are less clear or mechanical, however. “Last month I also looked at the another flat” shifts the focus without clearly connecting the comparison to your request, while “owing to this” has an unclear reference. The request for a meeting and formalities is also crowded into one sentence. Use clearer transitions and organise the letter around the three requested points, with each point explained in its own focused section.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the general situation, including “peaceful environment,” “helpful neighbours,” “facilities,” and “formalities.” These choices show some range beyond very basic wording. However, several spelling and word-choice errors make the letter less natural, such as “avialable,” “agrement paper,” and “a lot noise occur.” “Extend my agreement” would be more idiomatic than “extend my agreement paper,” and “the other flat” is more natural than “the another flat.” The phrase “busy city area” communicates the idea but could be more precise. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for renting, repairs and noise so your vocabulary is more accurate and appropriate to a formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentences, for example, “I am writing this letter to tell you…” and the sentence explaining why you rejected the other flat. The overall meaning is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. In “I would like to live in the same apartment more than 6 months,” the comparison needs a clearer construction, such as “for more than six months.” The question “when we will meet” uses statement word order after “when”; write “when we can meet.” There are also errors in “I am look forward” and “I know very well firstly I agreed,” where verb forms and sentence structure need correction. Practise embedded questions, verb patterns and sentence boundaries to make your varied structures more controlled.

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