Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Peter,

I am writing this letter to request longer the period of staying in this apartment. Originally the stay was for 6 month but i wanted to extend my agreement for a year.

As you know i asked for six month agreement because i was supposed to promote and change the job location but know i just came to know that that i will be getting promted and working at same location, i think this house has most of memorey and i do not want to move to another house living in same city.

There are some minor problem coming like the heater water is not working properly and the door bell is sometimes making a weird noise.

please let me know if you need any document for a new agreement and i hope to stay more

thank you

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three required points: you request an extension, explain that your work plans have changed, and report problems with the heater and doorbell. The requested period is clear—“for a year”—and the reason is relevant, but the explanation is somewhat unclear and under-developed, particularly the sequence about being promoted and changing your work location. The apartment problems are identified, though you could explain their impact or ask the owner to arrange repairs. The letter is also 10 words below the required minimum, so it needs a little more detail. Adding a clear request for a new agreement and a repair visit would make the response more complete and purposeful.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a sensible order: you make your request, explain the change in your plans, mention apartment problems, and close with a question about the agreement. Paragraphing helps separate these points, and phrases such as “As you know” and “please let me know” guide the reader. This gives the letter a coherent overall arrangement. To make the progression clearer and more polished, avoid repeating “that” in the explanation and clarify how the promotion relates to your original plan to move. The final request and closing could also be separated into complete, clearly punctuated sentences. These refinements would make the links between ideas feel less abrupt.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough relevant vocabulary to communicate the main message, including “extend my agreement,” “job location,” “heater,” and “door bell.” However, several word choices and spelling errors reduce precision and naturalness: “request longer the period” is awkward, “promoted” is misspelled, and “most of memorey” does not clearly express your intended meaning. “Minor problem coming” and “weird noise” are also vague or informal for a letter to a landlord. Choose more precise phrases for the work change and describe the appliance issue accurately. A wider range of natural rental-related expressions would help you communicate the request and repair concerns more confidently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, particularly in the explanation beginning “As you know,” and the main ideas remain understandable. However, some grammatical errors affect accuracy: “I am writing … to request longer the period” has an incorrect sentence pattern, and “Originally the stay was for 6 month” needs an article and a plural noun. The long sentence about your job plans also contains repeated “that” and unclear tense relationships. Capitalisation and punctuation need attention, including lowercase “i” and “please” and the run-on closing. Use shorter sentences to explain the changed plans, and check articles, plurals, verb forms, and sentence boundaries before submitting.

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