Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter you, because i want to extend my lease of apartment.

I want you to increase my stay for more six months, due to my training in this city. If you are going to charge me same amount of rent, i will be delightful, as well as i am ready for all kind of necessary documentation.

I was going to move to another region, but at the last moment the firm changed everything they said they need me in this location more, so now i am going to stay here more six months.

I am facing the issue in your apartment is only the furnance, because after midnight it gets turn off automatically. So i want you to fix this problem as soon as possible. Therefore, i can stay easily for more months without any concern.

Thank you for all your support and waiting for your further response.

Yours Faithfully,

Jashan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter covers all three required points: you request a further six months, explain that your employer has changed your plans, and report that the furnace switches off after midnight. The purpose is clear and the tone is generally polite, with an appropriate opening and closing. The reason for staying is relevant, but the explanation is somewhat compressed; clarify that the firm needs you to remain in this city and how this affects your original plan to move. The request about rent and your willingness to provide documents are useful additions, though “increase my stay” does not clearly express the request. More precise wording and slightly fuller development would make the letter more complete and effective.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a sensible order: the extension request comes first, followed by the changed plans and then the apartment problem. Separate paragraphs help the reader identify each point, and phrases such as “but at the last moment” and “So” show how ideas relate. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “I am writing this letter you, because…” does not smoothly introduce the purpose, while “Therefore, i can stay easily…” makes the link between repairing the furnace and extending the tenancy awkward. Use clearer transitions and ensure each paragraph develops one point in a direct sequence. This would make the progression more consistently natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main message, including relevant terms such as “lease,” “rent,” “documentation,” and “automatically.” There are also attempts at more specific language, particularly in describing the furnace problem. However, several word choices and collocations are noticeably inaccurate or unnatural: “increase my stay,” “same amount of rent,” “I will be delightful,” and “all kind of necessary documentation.” “Furnance” is also misspelled. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the request, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Build a stronger range of common rental and formal-letter expressions, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The letter includes both simple statements and longer sentences, such as the explanation beginning “I was going to move to another region, but…,” so there is some variety in sentence structure. The main ideas remain understandable, but errors occur in basic patterns and in the longer constructions. For example, “I am writing this letter you” is missing a preposition, “for more six months” has an incorrect comparative structure, and “after midnight it gets turn off” has a faulty verb form. Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in lowercase “i.” Practise accurate sentence patterns and verb forms, then proofread articles, prepositions, and punctuation. Greater control would make the varied sentences easier to read.

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