Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope are you doing well. I am writting this letter to requesting about extend my agreement, staying in your appartment.

No doubt, I'm staying here since last 6 month and now I have made mind to increase my lease upto next one year.There are few reason behind this that I would like to share you in following.

In order to better work opportunity I applied some other city and luckily I got new job offer but suddently I came to know that my current job place offer me promotion with satisafactory wage. Therefore , Moving to other place I prefered to stay here instead and decided to continue my lease till next one year.

Moreover, I want to request you there are some problem in your appartment that I have been facing since last two month leaking of bathroom shower which causes our shower room always remain wet and stingy smell. Could you fix it as soon as possible .

I would really appricate it ,if you keep my concern in action.

Your sincerely,

Kiran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three requirements: you request a further year, explain that your current employer offered a promotion and satisfactory pay, and report a leaking shower with its effect on the bathroom. Your purpose is clear throughout, and the explanation gives the owner a reason for your changed plans. The problem is also specific enough to understand, and you ask for it to be fixed. To make the letter more fully developed, clarify the rental dates or whether you are asking to extend the existing agreement, and describe the leak’s practical impact a little more precisely. A more consistently appropriate opening and closing would also strengthen the letter’s presentation to the owner.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible order: request and background first, reasons for staying next, then the apartment problem and a closing request. Paragraphing helps distinguish these points, and connectors such as “Therefore” and “Moreover” show how the ideas relate. This gives the response a coherent overall progression. However, some linking is mechanical or unclear: “There are few reason behind this that I would like to share you in following” announces the explanation awkwardly, while the long sentence beginning “In order to better work opportunity” makes the change in plans harder to follow. Use clearer transitions and divide that explanation into shorter sentences; also make references such as “this” more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “lease,” “promotion,” “wage,” and “leaking,” and the reader can understand the request and the problem. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “satisfactory wage.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “appartment,” “suddently,” “prefered,” and “stingy smell.” Some combinations are unnatural, for example “requesting about extend my agreement” and “keep my concern in action.” Aim to learn common collocations for renting and maintenance, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More accurate, natural phrasing would make the letter easier to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast between the new job offer and the promotion, and the main message remains understandable. However, errors in sentence structure and verb forms are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward or difficult to process. For example, “I hope are you doing well” has incorrect word order, and “I am writting this letter to requesting” combines verb forms incorrectly. The sentence beginning “In order to better work opportunity” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “I’m staying here since last 6 month” uses an unsuitable tense pattern. Practise accurate request forms and present-perfect constructions, and use full stops to separate ideas.

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